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http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PX-kTJFn ... re=related


I'm the dapper don, with all types of captions on
I could flash a shot, snap, picture perfect, camera's off
let the show begin, I slant my top, kick my cane, start dancin' off
whatever you jammin' on, I been on, now it's half the props
don't panic dawg, I'ma son ya, horizon, at the planets dawn
I might've rambled off, but it's repitition, that could channel all
troubled by manic thought, and depressive disorder, ration'd off
stanza's cross, parellel to weed smoke, drinks and grammer gone
the fact I'm crashin' on your grandmama's couch with sunglasses on
hung over because of my famished drop, what the? sandwich gone?
I think I'm dozing into another scenery, them pants is off
I toy with a womans thoughts, but I love to put mine in perspect
and if you lose the P and switch the word it rhymes with Respect
properly due, I'm like property's use, right when rent for property's due
you know, cash, dressed in all black, tears roll down mami's back
I'm sorry I forgot what I said, I'm high off life and time's all I lack
a white rabbit runnin' down the throat just like a Dasani cracked......... :wink:
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let the show begin, I slant my top, kick my cane, start dancin' off
whatever you jammin' on, I been on, now it's half the props
don't panic dawg, I'ma son ya, horizon, at the planets dawn
I might've rambled off, but it's repitition, that could channel all
Dam im just feeling the beat tho frereal... its a good vibin shit to drop to... Flow was on point on this and its on sum light hearted shit so thats whats up.. it must be summer lol... keep dropping... and now go feed on my shit q
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Post by Munteskue_lol »

I'm feelin it. It had a hella good flow. It wasn't like amazing or anything, but it was koo vibes and I could picture just bumpin somethin like that in my car.

-- Wed May 05, 2010 1:07 pm --

I'm feelin it. It had a hella good flow. It wasn't like amazing or anything, but it was koo vibes and I could picture just bumpin somethin like that in my car.
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I'm the dapper don, with all types of captions on
I could flash a shot, snap, picture perfect, camera's off
like what you where doin here an old concept thos
let the show begin, I slant my top, kick my cane, start dancin' off
whatever you jammin' on, I been on, now it's half the props
liked the first line second line i picked up slow but it was nice
don't panic dawg, I'ma son ya, horizon, at the planets dawn
I might've rambled off, but it's repitition, that could channel all
flow seems a bit choppy here to me nice lil metaphorical line 2nd line kinda fell off tho
troubled by manic thought, and depressive disorder, ration'd off
stanza's cross, parellel to weed smoke, drinks and grammer gone
flow kinda choppy here not really see in the point here
the fact I'm crashin' on your grandmama's couch with sunglasses on
hung over because of my famished drop, what the? sandwich gone?
this seems like your trying to be random but running out of things that could make since
I think I'm dozing into another scenery, them pants is off
I toy with a womans thoughts, but I love to put mine in perspect
and if you lose the P and switch the word it rhymes with Respect
properly due, I'm like property's use, right when rent for property's due
you know, cash, dressed in all black, tears roll down mami's back
I'm sorry I forgot what I said, I'm high off life and time's all I lack
a white rabbit runnin' down the throat just like a Dasani cracked
nice finish ok didnt have many multis that where on point i know you werent really going for a point you were just haven fun its just the fact it seemed like you forced some rhymes so you had something that would rhyme ima say it was below average but not bad in my eyes mostly becuz ive seen better from you
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