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Re: Another Key

Post by Haz »

Just a Key ..


it's A Fact i've Never Played With Snakes in Tha Grass
And i Aint Attracted To Hos Shakin Their Ass

Feeling this Opener

Homo? Naa i'm Past That i'm Just An Ordinary Gentleman
And When Tha Metal Spins it'll Be At Ya Head Like Excederin

Aight, Liking the First Line , Second Lines a Cool snap but itz Just a Key


i Could Say i Hold A Mag Or i'm Sharp With A Berretta
But i'm Already Tired Of Tha Gun Talk And Etcetera

I feel you

it's Funeral Music So i'll Lay Ya Down in A Bed Of Roses
Tha Reason Ya Head Exploded Duck When Tha Led's implodin

Kind of Ran the Previous bar in the Ground, Like the Flow

Rip Ya Cerebellum Out That's Latin For Little Brain
Then Expose Ya Lungs Through Ya Brittle Frame
And For A Little Caine i'm Not Crazy But i'll Get insane
i'll Leave Ya Paralyzed With Needles That Missed Tha Vein

LOL cold


i'm Courageous My Minds More Mature Than My Age is
And if You Wanna Check Tha Stages Ask For Extra Pages
A Wise Man Once Told Me Everything Happens For A Reason
So i'm Clappin And Squeezin 'Til Your Tactically Breathin

Cool Way to go Out, like the age is, wise man parts

Good punches, Nice Flow, Multis On Point, Snaps Was on point

This Was Good For Just a Key you Had One weak bar at that,

Good shit homie

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Re: Another Key

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Could Say i Hold A Mag Or i'm Sharp With A Berretta
But i'm Already Tired Of Tha Gun Talk And Etcetera
it's Funeral Music So i'll Lay Ya Down in A Bed Of Roses
Tha Reason Ya Head Exploded Duck When Tha Led's implodin
^^^^^^^^^^^^that was purdy nice
TOYH.....nice to see you back bro
keep writing!
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Re: Another Key

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it's A Fact i've Never Played With Snakes in Tha Grass
And i Aint Attracted To Hos Shakin Their Ass
Homo? Naa i'm Past That i'm Just An Ordinary Gentleman
And When Tha Metal Spins it'll Be At Ya Head Like Excederin
Killer opening!
i'm Courageous My Minds More Mature Than My Age is
And if You Wanna Check Tha Stages Ask For Extra Pages
Flowed hot made the point.... Tight flow...theres a lot more that i like but im kinda lazy with it now...over all ..for real..HOT! u should drop often duke...i enjoyed this
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Re: Another Key

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i Could Say i Hold A Mag Or i'm Sharp With A Berretta
But i'm Already Tired Of Tha Gun Talk And Etcetera

HOT shit... the whole opening was just ridiculously filthy

but the end was just like "it's koo, but whatever" for me

Just me tho, the other peoples like it. Everyone has their taste
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Re: Another Key

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ThaOneYouHate wrote:All Feed Will Be Returned As Always..

it's A Fact i've Never Played With Snakes in Tha Grass
And i Aint Attracted To Hos Shakin Their Ass

6/10

Homo? Naa i'm Past That i'm Just An Ordinary Gentleman
And When Tha Metal Spins it'll Be At Ya Head Like Excederin

6/10

i Could Say i Hold A Mag Or i'm Sharp With A Berretta
But i'm Already Tired Of Tha Gun Talk And Etcetera

it's Funeral Music So i'll Lay Ya Down in A Bed Of Roses
Tha Reason Ya Head Exploded Duck When Tha Led's implodin
Rip Ya Cerebellum Out That's Latin For Little Brain
Then Expose Ya Lungs Through Ya Brittle Frame

6/10

And For A Little Caine i'm Not Crazy But i'll Get insane
i'll Leave Ya Paralyzed With Needles That Missed Tha Vein

6/10

i'm Courageous My Minds More Mature Than My Age is
And if You Wanna Check Tha Stages Ask For Extra Pages
A Wise Man Once Told Me Everything Happens For A Reason
So i'm Clappin And Squeezin 'Til Your Tactically Breathin
Very average key, nothing like the "Free Agent Verse" that you did. Worth the read though.
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Re: Another Key

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i Could Say i Hold A Mag Or i'm Sharp With A Berretta
But i'm Already Tired Of Tha Gun Talk And Etcetera

I like the use of the word "etcetera" here, I'm a big fan of rhyming words that other people wouldn't think about using so this bar was my favorite. The whole piece was dope though, keep droppin bro.
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Re: Another Key

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it's A Fact i've Never Played With Snakes in Tha Grass
And i Aint Attracted To Hos Shakin Their Ass
nice opener with decent multis
Homo? Naa i'm Past That i'm Just An Ordinary Gentleman
And When Tha Metal Spins it'll Be At Ya Head Like Excederin
dont like the gun talk multi was nice and nice lil metaphor
i Could Say i Hold A Mag Or i'm Sharp With A Berretta
But i'm Already Tired Of Tha Gun Talk And Etcetera
liked this bar nice set up and nice multi
it's Funeral Music So i'll Lay Ya Down in A Bed Of Roses
Tha Reason Ya Head Exploded Duck When Tha Led's implodin
like the multis nice flow good shit
Rip Ya Cerebellum Out That's Latin For Little Brain
Then Expose Ya Lungs Through Ya Brittle Frame
multis on point but still weaker nice flow
And For A Little Caine i'm Not Crazy But i'll Get insane
i'll Leave Ya Paralyzed With Needles That Missed Tha Vein
flow was good multis where there to nice bar
i'm Courageous My Minds More Mature Than My Age is
And if You Wanna Check Tha Stages Ask For Extra Pages
A Wise Man Once Told Me Everything Happens For A Reason
So i'm Clappin And Squeezin 'Til Your Tactically Breathin
last two bars where on point this piece flow was on point and so where multis nothing that made me go ooo shit nice piece
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Re: Another Key

Post by trubblecleff »

the standout line was the etcetera rhyme
i didnt like the opening as much but thats a preference issue. i think it was a solid verse specially for a key drop
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