Rhyme #15 [Computer Love beat]

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Did this one for fun. tips appreciated.

EDIT: Here's the finished version of this rhyme.
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That's right, slower!

[Loon E Lou]

just sounds too mono tone. u got the swag and all. just way too different. ill never here that beat the same agin

[Riggz]

WTF??? LMFAO! This nigga crazy LMFAO! Took a classic instrumental like Computer Love and put some old luke skywalker shit to it LOL! oh shit.. that was hilarious.

[FlipSide]

Dude is ur mom in the next room...? Cuz it sounds like u tryna keep it low.. I could not even understand it.. I guess u can call this hip hop... Electronica or WTF ever... But Put some cojones into ur voice dude... Wait till mom goes shoppin then wild out on the mic or something

[Loon E Lou]

^^^^^ hahahaha

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Sound.222 is this you -- http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xC03hmS1Brk

"I'm bad, like the movie attack of the clones, I'm dangerous like a fire in a nursing home."

haha Jon Lajoie. We're from the same city. Been meaning to go to one of his shows.

Dude is ur mom in the next room...? Cuz it sounds like u tryna keep it low.. I could not even understand it.. I guess u can call this hip hop... Electronica or WTF ever... But Put some cojones into ur voice dude... Wait till mom goes shoppin then wild out on the mic or something

I don't like the way I sound when I'm going all out, voiced raised and what not. I sound like an angry white kid when I'd prefer to sound like a docile white kid I'm working on it though.

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Lol.. i Just Got Another Laugh Outta This... Thanks.

I don't know whether you're laughing at me or with me but I don't care lol I'm just glad someone's gettin' something out of this.

[FlipSide]

thats the muthafuckin problem dude...UR BLACK!!!!!!!!! WTF... U sound like a gay white kid... not to offend you.. u talkin about runnin door to door beatin bitches..and sound like u can even beat ya self.. I mean im not the best or anything..but u gotta put some effort... if u dont like the way u sound thats because u gotta keep looking for that sound... is that not ur name sound? then ...do a whole shit load of mic checkin until u find something that suits u...or if not then stay sound like that...cuz all in all i see potential in ur style... but i feel as if tho u not putting heart into it..and thats half ass to me... hope this can help u a lil... cuz i apprecite good music.. and im looking foward to hearing some shit!