For years the senseless consensus that I'ma defenseless specimen
Steered the census from commonsense so I must address-again
Express my written opinion, and give clues to those who've forgotten
I need music to breathe and you're polluting my oxygen
Preachers and teachers are plottin, breached and infected by toxins
They see checks and they cop them, and they reject other options
It's gotten so common I've issued a warning of caution
The whole industry's rotten, soaked through like absorbent cotton
Without Batman they're just robbin, stealing and concealing the problem
A tin-man, I'm disheartened at the ill ideals they're imparting
so until my free-will's departing, I'll dictate, direct and debate.
Like a master chess player meditating check mate,
I'll wait and reflect until they relate to my text
If it's to late to correct at least this weight's off my chest.
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ku ku. i liked the vocab. delivery was ku. haha i was flowin it out loud and came pretty dope. i dont really chek out alot of ur work but ill def try to come around to it more often. nice drop dawg
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Re: My Thesis
For years the senseless consensus that I'ma defenseless specimen
Steered the census from commonsense so I must address-again
Pretty Smooth, liked How it was switched
Express my written opinion, and give clues to those who've forgotten
I need music to breathe and you're polluting my oxygen
Think that was sort of a Reach.
Those who preach and teach have forgotten, breached and infected by toxins
They see checks and they cop them, and they reject other options
Aiight, not as Smooth As First Bar.
Without Batman they're just robbin, stealing and concealing the problem
A tin-man, I'm disheartened at the ill ideals they're imparting
Lol this is Pretty Cool
so until my free-will's departing, I'll dictate, direct and debate.
Like a master chess player meditating check mate,
Cool Cool.
I'll wait and reflect until they relate to my text
If it's to late to correct at least this weight's off my chest.
Nice Way To Go Out, Smooth just like ya First One.
I've Seen you write better, But for What its Worth This was Pretty Cool. I Liked The First n Last Bars the Most.. Feel Like some parts u kind of Went Softer On in the Sense of Flowing it N putting it Together.
But good shit
Stay Up N Keep Droppin
Steered the census from commonsense so I must address-again
Pretty Smooth, liked How it was switched
Express my written opinion, and give clues to those who've forgotten
I need music to breathe and you're polluting my oxygen
Think that was sort of a Reach.
Those who preach and teach have forgotten, breached and infected by toxins
They see checks and they cop them, and they reject other options
Aiight, not as Smooth As First Bar.
Without Batman they're just robbin, stealing and concealing the problem
A tin-man, I'm disheartened at the ill ideals they're imparting
Lol this is Pretty Cool
so until my free-will's departing, I'll dictate, direct and debate.
Like a master chess player meditating check mate,
Cool Cool.
I'll wait and reflect until they relate to my text
If it's to late to correct at least this weight's off my chest.
Nice Way To Go Out, Smooth just like ya First One.
I've Seen you write better, But for What its Worth This was Pretty Cool. I Liked The First n Last Bars the Most.. Feel Like some parts u kind of Went Softer On in the Sense of Flowing it N putting it Together.
But good shit
Stay Up N Keep Droppin

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Thanks, I was trying something a little different in terms of rhyme scheme and flow in this one so I appreciate the feedback.
I don't drop rhymes all the time, but when I do, I prefer to spit fire
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lovin the vocab in this drop. and it flowed pretty well throughout. multis and inners present.......and idk why but i enjoyed this...tho the topic is tackled ALOT

From the first bar it's "microsoft word" when the verse starts
Cuz in your mind I "insert" "pictures" with my "word art"
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I really think that was clever as hell, the whole chess player line, and that is the only thing that I'll probably every remember from this piece, but its better than nothing.JJunior77 wrote:For years the senseless consensus that I'ma defenseless specimen
Steered the census from commonsense so I must address-again
Express my written opinion, and give clues to those who've forgotten
I need music to breathe and you're polluting my oxygen
[Nice]
Preachers and teachers are plottin, breached and infected by toxins
They see checks and they cop them, and they reject other options
It's gotten so common I've issued a warning of caution
The whole industry's rotten, soaked through like absorbent cotton
[The punch could have been slightly stronger!]
Without Batman they're just robbin, stealing and concealing the problem
A tin-man, I'm disheartened at the ill ideals they're imparting
so until my free-will's departing, I'll dictate, direct and debate.
Like a master chess player meditating check mate,
[Perfect, really loved them lines, besides the "departing" rhyme, the rest was flawless.]
I'll wait and reflect until they relate to my text
If it's to late to correct at least this weight's off my chest.
[Too simple]
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