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"I Say My Goodbyes Today" just one of my old poems

Expand your artistic ability through poetry and story telling. Poetry has been given new life ever since the inception of hip hop. Relax for a minute and explore your poetic side here.

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Word Felling that....

The world I see it as a cell a being as a membrane if I leave will it be the same?
Tears of joy let you feel warmth, the tears of pain always feel like a cold rain.
The air that used to be clean is poisoned with hate and jealousy, it kills like cocaine.

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Post by complexity »

The question is, will it get here?
The biggest problem is we never face our problems we always flee in fear.
I really don't know quite get your direction with this piece. You couldn't kill yourself one moment. Then evil had a grasp on you the next. Ill have to re-read it maybe. Or you can help clarify.

Overall it was a good read. Nice emotion, etc.
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Itz Pretty Str8 ..
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

i seen betta JJ but it wasnt bad...juz work on ya structure...ye i aint no expert eitha wit it juz leavi ya sum feed homie -1-
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I've seen and done it all and feel its time to fall.
If I could give my life I'd let you have it but, I'm falling in this pit.
It feels as if I'm burning the wheels of life keep turning.
^^ Fav Lines. Turned Out Ok in The End But i Donno Exactly What The Topic Was. Some Parts Seemed Like 'Stuck in a Rut' Kinda Poem. Others Seemed Like 'Hope'. Which Kinda Falls into The Same Thing But it Flowed Well. Well Done
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