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My Business feat slick beast

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i think your name was something slick t beast? idk
but i do know i'm the guy in the first verse =)
try to get dosia on the track but he said he's going to do a drive by with his homies lol ... anyways here it is


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Re: My Business feat slick beast

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yo this was pretty dope, as far as the quality I could hear you for the most part but there were some places that were hard to understand but I dunno if that's an issue with the volume of the beat or the mic. As far as content goes, it was pretty solid with some nice punches and word play. If there was another verse (aka if it was longer) this is something I could envision hearing on the radio.
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Post by Young K »

The beats kool, could deffo rip this; hook fits nicely.

And your quality's pretty good; might want to turn down the adlibs a tad though. Your flow is nice, and lyrics are ok.

Second dude, you need to find a better place to set up your mic, your verse sounds echoed or something but besides that your flow was on point and lyrics were dope, punches were straight man.

Solid track overall,

6.5/10
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Post by Kurse »

Beat was decent. It's not the type of beat that I'd personally bless...but hey, that's just me! lol Crunchtime's quality did seem to sound better than Halftime's. Half's just had this bad, echoey effect on it...it kinda ruined his verse.
Back to Crunch. Some solid punch's in there. Flow was on point for most of the verse. Kinda liked that grimey voice, it definitely fit the beat well. Interested in hearing more...I hope this is just the beginning for you here on illest.

7/10
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JJunior77 wrote:yo this was pretty dope, as far as the quality I could hear you for the most part but there were some places that were hard to understand but I dunno if that's an issue with the volume of the beat or the mic. As far as content goes, it was pretty solid with some nice punches and word play. If there was another verse (aka if it was longer) this is something I could envision hearing on the radio.
Well said JJunior77!

IMO on the mixing- Turn the "Business" vocals way up (if you can) and turn the verse wayy down. Your vocal dominates the song so we can't hear the beat.

Lyrically (written)- I think it's a 7/10 too.
Vocal Performance- 8.5/10
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Post by Loon E Lou »

this shit is dope. c-time u did ur thing dawg. u got a ku ass flow. keep that shit comin dawg. slick, jus the quality dawg is the only thing to wrk on. flow and errything was on point. beat an all was.... eh. kinda like alot shit im hearin. shit was fresh all around tho, for what it was. crunch holla at me bout the collab
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Post by Haz »

First Verse was cool .. Beat was Straight... Ain't Like first Persons flow sounded like someone tryna Mimic lil Wayne 2 Me ..

I Thought The Second Verse was hot, quality blah blah blah.
But Punchlines was Cool .. N just the Flow Was Crisp. Liked the "cross niggaz" line n Bus Pass Line.


Anyways Cool track keep droppin
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Post by Riggz »

Crunch you kind of got that Lil Wayne off the cuff thing going. liked the hook on the track. Your voice fit it.
2nd verse may need to turn off the reverb or the chamber echo, either way it's overpowering.

It was ok.
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Post by Slick T. Beast »

dam you did put it up, iight cool.
and yeah that second verse was me, the quality was shitty and i knew it, but i was in a rush. but crunch we definitely gotta do another collab and ill make sure my shits on point next time.
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Post by HKX »

shit was good man gotta agree wit da quality shit tho overall da track was nice man. See if u could have Halftime re do his verse make it sound like urs should be straight. Keep droppin' man.

-- 07 Mar 2010 21:14 --

beats dope, Crunchtime's flow was nice had sum good lines on there. Halftime did his thing on da beat def went in on it.
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thanks homie
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Post by The Gonz »

Overall, the track was pretty good. I could see people bumping it. Crunch kinda reminds me of some hybrid mix of Wayne, Cory Guns and Yukmouth. Of course, the lyrics could be improved on but it wasn't really necessary for a track like this. Quality was pretty good.
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beat is pretty coo. yea ur quality aint too good, but it mostly sounds like u jus cut all the bass in ur eq. so try to eq it and cut some of the mid-high end frequencies on ur vocal to make it sound smoother. the rap wasnt bad tho, u got a nice sound, pretty original. second dude not bad. could clean his verse up a bit, and maybe work on shapin delivery a bit more.
lyrically this wasnt the dopest,
but the "guns that make ur dick look small" line was pretty humorous
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Post by FlipSide »

the beat was hot.....the first verse was hot.....but the second verse was weaker
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