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Re: Lyrical Genocide

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Aye Not Bad For A quick Piece Kept The Multies In There And The Flow Started Well But Started To Go Downhill At The End But Not Too Much Pretty Solid But Should Have A Consistent Flow So Not To Fall Off Again
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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Re: Lyrical Genocide

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i'm Tha Shit But You Dudes Are Feces
i'm Of Tha Human Race But i'm New To Tha Species
Critically Acclaimed is Tha Only Time Ya'll Dope
But My Lyrics Stall Throats i'll Piss On You Faggots 'Til My Balls Float



i was feelin this ^^



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Re: Lyrical Genocide

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"Most of you couldn't elevate ridin' elevators"

That was my favorite line from this; but the whole thing was good. Especially for a quick key, the multi's were there and for the way I was reading it, it flowed good. Keep doin your thing bro.
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Re: Lyrical Genocide

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There's A Title? Let Me Get A Shot At That
i'm Waitin Hopin That You'll Holla Back

lool Shots Fired.

i'm "A" Sexual Only i Can Fuck With Me
i'm Not Sick But i Write Disgustingly

First concepts Sorta Played But Still a Nice bar

i Spit Volatile Fluids That'll Set A Page in Flames
Enraged From Games Remember i Dont Play With Lames

Aight

This is My Court So i'm Takin Tha Ball Faggots
He Didn't Just Say it Did He? i'm Callin Ya'll Faggots

aight..

Projects Run Through My Veins i Lay Bars And Break Bricks
There's A New Stake Kids i Could Put One in Ya Face... Bid!

Lol this is Cool

i'm Tha Shit But You Dudes Are Feces
i'm Of Tha Human Race But i'm New To Tha Species

aiight

Critically Acclaimed is Tha Only Time Ya'll Dope
But My Lyrics Stall Throats i'll Piss On You Faggots 'Til My Balls Float

Lmaoo

My Lyrics Venomous So i Hope Ya Make Tha Right Decision
Fuck With Me And Ya Throat Could Catch Knife incisions
i Dont Care if You Eatin i'll Even Snipe Ya Kitchen
i Seriously Hope Ya Dont Like Tha Life Ya Livin

Hard.


Welcome To Hell This is Where i Grew Up At
You Dudes Aint Even Good Enough For Ass Ya'll is Butt Crack

nah.


if You Don't Concur i'm Tha Greatest i'll Leave Ya Thinkin Ho's
Thank Tha Bic if Ya Feelin Lucky Cuz Tha ink is Low

LoL

Sorry Kids But i'm Gonna Have To End This Quick
You Couldn't Beat Me Even if You Took Up Practice Bendin Dick

nah

Most Of You Couldn't Elevate Ridin Elevators
i'm Not Tha Greatest?.. i'll Get Better Later

Aiight..



Pretty Cool Piece, i see u changing ya Style.
Liked what you did with the verse Some Ups N Some Downs
but Still Came Hard ..


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Re: Lyrical Genocide

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good shit man, consistant flow, not too complicated, few nice zingers mixed in, overall pretty slick key up

i liked the "a-sexual" line, ive never seen it used, lol hazard said its played but its new ta me
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Re: Lyrical Genocide

Post by QwarterZ »

I was feeling this....I see your goin' back n forth with ideas now
but this was a very dope piece
good to see you rhymin' again my dude
well.....in the LYRICAL HIP HOP sense....keep doin' you!
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this is ok i guess...tbh i'm not too impressed cuz i have seen keys better than this. it started off nice with nice concepts (loved that A sexual line) then after the first few bars the quality fell off so i got bored and disappointed as it went along. overall this is decent and this generally happens with keys....think i'll look out for somethin more thought out from u i can tell u can write
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Re: Lyrical Genocide

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yea i think it kinda went down when u said butt crack.. but other than that good shit..
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6-7/10
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Critically Acclaimed is Tha Only Time Ya'll Dope
But My Lyrics Stall Throats i'll Piss On You Faggots 'Til My Balls Float

^ my fav line in ya drop,

thought the rhyme scheme and rhymes were fairly simple, the flow and punchlines made up for that but, it's good to see you writting again.. i've seen better from ya but still thought this was good, keep dropping 6.5/10
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Re: Lyrical Genocide

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TOYH dis shit is ill, felt dis drop homie u def need 2 record dis one. Like 2 see how it sounds drop was wicked man mad pros. Lines went hard homie.
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Re: Lyrical Genocide

Post by Riggz »

...and I never replied to this? ...hmmmm :twisted: nah I ain't gonna fuk wit you Toyh... you my nigga...

but check it "i'm "A" Sexual Only i Can Fuck With Me
i'm Not Sick But i Write Disgustingly" -- this whole piece would probably be nice as hell vocally.. lyrically it has it's highs and lows. I just dig your arrogant, prick type style. ;)
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Re: Lyrical Genocide

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ThaOneYouHate wrote:Quick Key... Haven't Been Droppin As Recent As i Used To.. So Here's Another Piece For Ya'll...


There's A Title? Let Me Get A Shot At That
i'm Waitin Hopin That You'll Holla Back

[Ok]

i'm "A" Sexual Only i Can Fuck With Me
i'm Not Sick But i Write Disgustingly

[Good flip here]

i Spit Volatile Fluids That'll Set A Page in Flames
Enraged From Games Remember i Dont Play With Lames

[Alright, good rhyming]

This is My Court So i'm Takin Tha Ball Faggots
He Didn't Just Say it Did He? i'm Callin Ya'll Faggots

[Ok]

Projects Run Through My Veins i Lay Bars And Break Bricks
There's A New Stake Kids i Could Put One in Ya Face... Bid!

[no]

i'm Tha Shit But You Dudes Are Feces
i'm Of Tha Human Race But i'm New To Tha Species



Critically Acclaimed is Tha Only Time Ya'll Dope
But My Lyrics Stall Throats i'll Piss On You Faggots 'Til My Balls Float

[I didn't like this]

My Lyrics Venomous So i Hope Ya Make Tha Right Decision
Fuck With Me And Ya Throat Could Catch Knife incisions

[That's an old school line]

i Dont Care if You Eatin i'll Even Snipe Ya Kitchen
i Seriously Hope Ya Dont Like Tha Life Ya Livin

[Good one]

Welcome To Hell This is Where i Grew Up At
You Dudes Aint Even Good Enough For Ass Ya'll is Butt Crack

[Nope]

if You Don't Concur i'm Tha Greatest i'll Leave Ya Thinkin Ho's
Thank Tha Bic if Ya Feelin Lucky Cuz Tha ink is Low

[Cool]

Sorry Kids But i'm Gonna Have To End This Quick
You Couldn't Beat Me Even if You Took Up Practice Bendin Dick

[No]

Most Of You Couldn't Elevate Ridin Elevators
i'm Not Tha Greatest?.. i'll Get Better Later

[No]


I thought this was an entertaining piece. One thing that I love about your writing style is that its not long and windy, straight to the point. This piece was no different, the only thing that was lacking here, might have been the creativity.
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