The first line is influenced heavily by a line from the one and only Domino.
A career latches onto you like a vicious germ, in no explicit terms
But life can throw you down slopes with only twists and turns
Where you don't wanna go, 'starved for life' that hunger I know
can't stay under control, seems the older I get the younger my soul
I just want to be able to set something in stone when I come to that road
where there is no looking back, when its time to confront the unknown
the wonderful blow of the wind leaves my body somber and cold
though it seems the longer I go, honestly I'm stronger to show
when you're constantly told that you won't accomplish your goals
you start trying to play volatile roles kind of like Oliver Stones
friends are calling your home; they don't dare to knock on your door
thoughts are often unsure, you're like a solider that is lost in a war
either or, a conceded bore, the only reason for your existence
is achieving more, friends are neither nor, in need of a witness
if you're being consistent, you will become extremely religious
far sighted though, you can't see yourself perceived from a distance
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Re: My Career...
damn. thas sum real shit plex. i like all the elevated vocab. at least, to me its elevated. all the way thru the shit was locked on dawg. very elaborate piece. "cant stay under control, seems like the older i get, the younger my soul."<----like this line. but then agin.....this piece had more lines than whitneys coffee table. haha. i dont get to read ur work very often, but im glad i opened this shit up. and if ur still gettn better....then DAMN. i got alotta catchin up to do homie. i dont even know if this is ur best wrk but i DO know thats its the best ive read so far on here. no dick-ridin. jus real talk. good shit plex
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Re: My Career...
Same O'l Plex, Still Killin Shit. I Like This Piece The Most Cuz Of How Deep It Is. And Even Though It's Just Text, I Like The Emotion In It.
Good Drop Man, Stay At It.
Favorite Lines As Follows:
"can't stay under control, seems the older I get the younger my soul
I just want to be able to set something in stone when I come to that road"
"though it seems the longer I go, honestly I'm stronger to show
when you're constantly told that you won't accomplish your goals
you start trying to play volatile roles kind of like Oliver Stones"
The Whole Thing Was Dope Though, Props.
B E Z
Good Drop Man, Stay At It.
Favorite Lines As Follows:
"can't stay under control, seems the older I get the younger my soul
I just want to be able to set something in stone when I come to that road"
"though it seems the longer I go, honestly I'm stronger to show
when you're constantly told that you won't accomplish your goals
you start trying to play volatile roles kind of like Oliver Stones"
The Whole Thing Was Dope Though, Props.
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Re: My Career...
-- liked the ending "friends are calling your home; they don't dare to knock on your door
thoughts are often unsure, you're like a solider that is lost in a war
either or, a conceded bore, the only reason for your existence
is achieving more, friends are neither nor, in need of a witness
if you're being consistent, you will become extremely religious
far sighted though, you can't see yourself perceived from a distance"
Not to take away from a very emotional piece, but I think you should unlock your vast vocabulary in some of your scripts. I've seen you do in the chat box... for example adjectives like "vicious" and "wonderful" have quite a few replacements at its disposal which could bring out just as much (if not more)..I don't know... joie de vivre (know what I mean?).
Still, the piece flowed with ease as it should, and you took a path down a topic less traveled.
Always an enjoyable read.
thoughts are often unsure, you're like a solider that is lost in a war
either or, a conceded bore, the only reason for your existence
is achieving more, friends are neither nor, in need of a witness
if you're being consistent, you will become extremely religious
far sighted though, you can't see yourself perceived from a distance"
Not to take away from a very emotional piece, but I think you should unlock your vast vocabulary in some of your scripts. I've seen you do in the chat box... for example adjectives like "vicious" and "wonderful" have quite a few replacements at its disposal which could bring out just as much (if not more)..I don't know... joie de vivre (know what I mean?).
Still, the piece flowed with ease as it should, and you took a path down a topic less traveled.
Always an enjoyable read.
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Re: My Career...
A career latches onto you like a vicious germ, in no explicit terms
But life can throw you down slopes with only twists and turns
Where you don't wanna go, 'starved for life' that hunger I know
can't stay under control, seems the older I get the younger my soul
Cool Cool .. Scheme Weaved Together Nicely, Understanding of what ur Tryna Get at is Taken from this Lil part Which is Good cause ThaT Means its a Good Opener...
I just want to be able to set something in stone when I come to that road
where there is no looking back, when its time to confront the unknown
Liking This.
the wonderful blow of the wind leaves my body somber and cold
though it seems the longer I go, honestly I'm stronger to show
I Feel like this could be Scrapped or Reworded in Another Direction, just cause its More of a "what" to me.. But thats Personal Observation. N Not cause Vocab but How it's weaved Together.
you start trying to play volatile roles kind of like Oliver Stones
friends are calling your home; they don't dare to knock on your door
thoughts are often unsure, you're like a solider that is lost in a war
This is hard .. Just a Crazy feel.
either or, a conceded bore, the only reason for your existence
is achieving more, friends are neither nor, in need of a witness
if you're being consistent, you will become extremely religious
far sighted though, you can't see yourself perceived from a distance
Weaved Together Nicely, u killed this Ending...
The Verse holds Solidness N Is Consistent.. Meaningful,
Lyrical Point of Few it Was Cool 2.
I Liked it, a few Things u could Tweek a Lil but it was a Good Read
Stay Up N Keep Dropping
But life can throw you down slopes with only twists and turns
Where you don't wanna go, 'starved for life' that hunger I know
can't stay under control, seems the older I get the younger my soul
Cool Cool .. Scheme Weaved Together Nicely, Understanding of what ur Tryna Get at is Taken from this Lil part Which is Good cause ThaT Means its a Good Opener...
I just want to be able to set something in stone when I come to that road
where there is no looking back, when its time to confront the unknown
Liking This.
the wonderful blow of the wind leaves my body somber and cold
though it seems the longer I go, honestly I'm stronger to show
I Feel like this could be Scrapped or Reworded in Another Direction, just cause its More of a "what" to me.. But thats Personal Observation. N Not cause Vocab but How it's weaved Together.
you start trying to play volatile roles kind of like Oliver Stones
friends are calling your home; they don't dare to knock on your door
thoughts are often unsure, you're like a solider that is lost in a war
This is hard .. Just a Crazy feel.
either or, a conceded bore, the only reason for your existence
is achieving more, friends are neither nor, in need of a witness
if you're being consistent, you will become extremely religious
far sighted though, you can't see yourself perceived from a distance
Weaved Together Nicely, u killed this Ending...
The Verse holds Solidness N Is Consistent.. Meaningful,
Lyrical Point of Few it Was Cool 2.
I Liked it, a few Things u could Tweek a Lil but it was a Good Read
Stay Up N Keep Dropping

Re: My Career...
though it seems the longer I go, honestly I'm stronger to show
when you're constantly told that you won't accomplish your goals
you start trying to play volatile roles kind of like Oliver Stones
friends are calling your home; they don't dare to knock on your door
thoughts are often unsure, you're like a solider that is lost in a war
best part ^^ nice shit fam!!
when you're constantly told that you won't accomplish your goals
you start trying to play volatile roles kind of like Oliver Stones
friends are calling your home; they don't dare to knock on your door
thoughts are often unsure, you're like a solider that is lost in a war
best part ^^ nice shit fam!!
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Re: My Career...
i could copy n paste the whole piece so im not gonna.. shit was illy man from start to finish... all elements used to perfection but what else is new from plex lol
great lil verse homie
great lil verse homie
i'll smack yuh with rage i force multis outta my ass to the page
Re: My Career...
This piece was good and seems like everything that I've read of yours of late is real topical and not just an extended bragadocious-type joint.
"I just want to be able to set something in stone when I come to that road
where there is no looking back, when its time to confront the unknown"
I can identify with this line especially and the way it's connected to the rest of it with the multis is very nice.
"I just want to be able to set something in stone when I come to that road
where there is no looking back, when its time to confront the unknown"
I can identify with this line especially and the way it's connected to the rest of it with the multis is very nice.
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