Da Nemesis vs. Loon E Lou

[Loon E Lou]

how long u wanna go dawg?

[da nemesis]

hit howeva long u wanna go..aint no trippin here

[Loon E Lou]

ku. drop within the hr?

[da nemesis]

aight

[Loon E Lou]

aight. first to fin drop

[da nemesis]

who is this nigga callin himself loon e lou//
i see bitch in u so ima cahnge ur name 2 lucy lou//
fake ass nigga probably should call u looney toon//

u that kind of nigga thatll think he got a dime bitch but she really a booty do//
thinkin she americas next top model but bitch look like scooby doo//


im sendin meseges u actil like u not gettin this//
ur dad still regrettin u the nut the sock didnt get//
the real bullshit is how ur mama sucked the dick but when it was ur birth nut she didnt swallow it//

nemesis, aint no stoppin this//
attle up 4 a real battle cuz im rockin this, the embarassment im leavin u will have u mad aint no blockin this//
u on a level beneath me, id advise u get from under my mic cuz its rainin fire, u thinkin its the apocolypse, the 2nd comin of jesus//

[Loon E Lou]

now watch me play this dude, like the game he took the name from.
real original, this wack is here, jus to play dumb.
fuck where he came from.
virginities.
i take em.
a rookie like urself,has no bidness in this forum.
ur battles?
boredom.
thas all i gotta say dawg.
the only clips you packin be the ones
in ya ipod.
its ova.
its pointless if u even try respondin.
go back to ridin dick on the board homie
u garbage.

[Quix]

Punches: close but Nem
Flow: loon
Multies: Nem
Personal: Tie ... None really!
wordplay: TIE
Enjoyment: Nem
Vote: Nem


uhh, wasn't feelin yah verse here Loony, it came off choppy and there wasn't much to it! Nem took this one with better punches, multies ... and was feelin it more!


stay up both yous!

[deville009]

well after rereading both drops again. ima have to change my vote..


Punches:Nem
Flow: Loon
Multies:loon, didnt see none from Nem
Personal:Nem,
wordplay:None
Enjoyment: Nem
Vote:Nem


although loons flowed better, just didnt have any punches...
good battle ya'll

[Quix]

UMM DID you just vote for both of them?? lol

[deville009]

no im voting for nem...
i re read both drops again this morning and the outcome was different after reading both drops.

[Loon E Lou]

all gravy fellas good lookin out.

[Riggz]

wow.. ok.. wow.. here we go.
I'm not going to break this down cause you'd both score very low.
Word of advice
Nemesis, you had a lot of just terrible punches.. bitches look like scoobydoo and change his name to lucy lou and just 3rd grade shit. Be more creative and take your time, you don't have to drop so quickly (i make that mistake myself time to time and usually lose the battle for not focusing and critiquing my own shit)

Loon, you have to seperate audio flows from text flow, You understand your own flow, but it comes off choppy to others, and it barely looks like you had 3-4 sentences all together. Work on structuring your verses
AA/BB style works best. In other words put your words on the same line and end bars consecutively. Right now, your verse looks like a flag pole.
like
this
right
here
see
what
i'm
saying

vote - Nemesis
His "so called" punches in the beginning were the knock out blows (for the sake of argument).
Loony, i know you got skillz, just need to figure out how to text battle with punches, multies, word play, name play, all that good shit folks like to read in a style peeps can flow with.