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Cuz the way I figga ego can’t get no bigga,
I considered one of them uppity hiccups,
Pass the poupon, upper class echelon,
PhDs like a big ass lexicon
More pieces than a leprechaun, see
PhD plastered on the marquee, smooth as Chablis when I free, 360 degrees of PhD, It’s all about me,
I insist, I'm too crisp when I twist my shi* like this,
if not I handle it wit my fist, I never miss,
Like Cassius champ, big plans like genie in a magic lamp,
hell yeah I’m amped cuz benjamins infiltrating my camp
In stacks, to the max like the lotto, gang of bravado,
like Capone that capo from Chicago,
big booty broad aficionado, kid
let me hit the skids, cuz I renege on the bid
can’t show ya'll the true Ace PhD really is!

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help a brotha perfect it!
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fell apart at the end but the beginning was really good.Next time try to close harder.
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thanks for the feed.
help a brotha perfect it!
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Re: Marquee

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mayne couldnt quite catch the flow but it wasnt bad overall maybe work on ya layout
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Re: Marquee

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Again, no ideahow long you've been here but welcome. The meain problem with this is the structure. I think it you work out the structure, you'll find the flow will fall into place.

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