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SANTANA SNOW
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I DONT LOVE A HOE I DONT TRUST A TRICK/
YOU DO ONE OF THOSE THAT MAKES YOU IGNORANT/
I JUST FUCK A BITCH SHE USE TO BE INNOCENT/
THEN TURNED INTO A SLUT AFTER WE GOT INTIMATE/
PESSY TIGHT AS HELL ESPECIALLY WHEN SHE CLINCHES IT/
A DELIGHTFUL SMELL APPLE MIXED WITH CINNAMON/
AND SHE STARTS TO YELL I ONLY HAD AN INCH IN IT/
BEAT THE PUSSY TIL ITS BLUE I THINK HER CLIT IS CRIPPIN IT/
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Post by Dana Riot »

LOL...

The first two bars kinda started it slow but the last 2 bars turned a kinda overused idea into a funny ass drop.

PESSY TIGHT AS HELL ESPECIALLY WHEN SHE CLINCHES IT/ hahahahaha, good use of imagination, wouldn't mind seeing what else you could do lol.
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I thought this was purdy cool
I think if you used your visual surroundings more
then you coulda pulled this off nicer
it's easier visualizin' what you sayin'
instead of just coming across with braggidocio type rhymes

but after you get some expansion on I think you'd come off dope
got some vocab on you so keep writing!
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