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I’m a ravenous beast leavin’ plasma in streets
chicks pass examine physiques until my stamina peaks
make a dash for the weed combining evil and knowledge
thieves’ll pay homage as many seeds are abolished
plead for the polished but seems their text is at random
my passion for sick is rich, like havin’ sex in a mansion
perplexed when you dancing at shells that fall to your feet
ninety percent of you swine, I’m bringing all but the beef
dutch apple bob for your teeth I’m droppin jaws to their gloom
most of yall will conclude my tightness crawled from a womb
how dare yall presume that you can judge me your highness
while you walkin’ the platform of splinters lodged in your iris
**SWITCH**
pausing for pilots that often fly by my cadence
so you can ride the vibration that my saliva’s creatin’
and while the virus is makin’ it’s lowly way to your disk
think of a way to resist this one fact you hate to admit…

this shit is raw shit is raw shit is raw shit is raw
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Post by Cee4 »

nice verse Riggz. Nice flow, nice mulits...everything was nice lol


except this line
my passion for sick is rich, like havin’ sex in a mansion
^^^^
i dunno i just wasnt feeling it for some reason

i liked the last 2 bars the best
pausing for pilots that often fly by my cadence
so you can ride the vibration that my saliva’s creatin’
and while the virus is makin’ it’s lowly way to your disk
think of a way to resist this one fact you hate to admit…
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Can I BE anymore slept on? Thanks for peepin' Cee. I'm glad I do this to increase my skillz.. otherwise, i'd be "highly" upset that I don't get the same respect I give others.. 8)
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mayne the multies was dope upstandard for the vocan mayne slept on you should not worry people will leave feed soon enough nice verse here
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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I was feeling this some parts had me go back n I was like ohhhhhhh

I was digging the beginning tho'! very dope verse!

I’m a ravenous beast leavin’ plasma in streets
chicks pass examine physiques until my stamina peaks
make a dash for the weed combining evil and knowledge
^^^ that alone was like whoa! I'm diggin' it tho
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Thanks Mutual/QZ. I'll try incorporatin' this style in audio soon.

Always appreciate the feed back (like everyone else does I'm sure)
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You this was pretty tight.
feelin it for sure.
Love the ending lol.
Keep droppin man.
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Thanks Def. Thinkin' of usin this style in my battles. Folks tend to lean more towards multisyllables and word play here. I can either move with the crowd or move the crowd... blah.
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Thanks TOYH.. working on the multis. I adapt to my surroundings. I'm usually a punchline artist, but I noticed that adding more complexity and word play to my scripts improves the writing.

I like Plex's quote on his siggy: "The better writer you become, the more you realize how horrible you actually are."
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Yu do audio? If not.. Think yu'd be pretty dope on mic. This was a pretty tight drop fam. Text pieces for me are normally.... Really, hmmm... They aren't something yu could throw down on mic, since its written, it should be really creative.. Imaginative. But that's just me..

Never the less, was tight drop.

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Post by Frank Black »

this was decent man nice multies the old school flo ma nicca hahaah good shit man!
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I completely understand what you're talking about both about being slept on and agreeing with Plex that the better you become the more you realize how horrible you actually are, but this piece is dope from start to finish. That dutch apple bob teeth line stood out to me and I had to go back and re-read the whole thing just to get the full effect of the context. Good shit, keep droppin and don't let a lack of feed deter you.
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Thanks JJ.. I get one off every now and then... I was actually going to use this an audio and just decided to make it a written.
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