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Bring The Future Back

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This haze sucks all-praise the slut with outrageous lusts
Embrace the weight and raise it up 10 would be nice but 8’s enuff
Should’ve hibernated through hip hop’s crises stages
I dwell in the ice ages, but my wise advise makes it-
Hard for me to inter-act with those who aren’t used to that
I aint new to crap.. so I refuse to lose the fact that
Like Hov’ said, you “Cant bring the future-back”
I’m a corporate kid Beating hard-knocks in amorphous quick
Enormous pricks catch the size of my forceps grip
and get booted out the frame just for the sport of it…
My words still hold weight even on unstable syllable beams
My lyrical schemes go further back than your umbilical dreams
As silly as it seems, I’m hip-hop’s Maitre de
Consistently debatin’ these, minor changes in the major leagues
It’s escapin’ me but you don’t see tears soaked in my eyes
Simply set a goal for the prize and focus on what’s close to my life
I’m dope on the rise a quick note to the guys “drop ya verse”
Props to papa smurf as I pop scholars off like bibliographers

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Re: Bring The Future Back

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mayne this was nice smooth flow the mutlis did pretty well and overall a nice piece to read mayne keep that ish comin

My words still hold weight even on unstable syllable beams
My lyrical schemes go further back than your umbilical dreams
As silly as it seems, I’m hip-hop’s Maitre de
Consistently debatin’ these, minor changes in the major leagues

fav part

nice shit anyhow Riggz
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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Re: Bring The Future Back

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Consistently debatin’ these, minor changes in the major leagues


Best Line Out The Verse.

Overall This was Alright,
i Feel Like you Tried To Jump With your Rhyme scheme n it some Part's it just Felt Awkward.

The Vocab Was good .. but The Thing is Just Vocab Doesn't Cut it,
This was Def a Decent Read

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Definitely a step up from what I've seen from you previously. I think this is a nice showcase of your potential. Had good multies, some slick rhyme schemes, flow was good. This shit was good.
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Re: Bring The Future Back

Post by complexity »

I agree with Ruckus.

The rhyme scheme and flow were well above average. The problem is, the message was extremely difficult to follow, and without a straight forward concept, you need a lot of dope lines. I really didn't see that many that stood out.

So, cool drop, I just want to see something another level up.
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