What you think about me i dont care

[justRJ]

imma youth man, soon to be grown up/
on my gorwn up shit, yea i smoke up/
Day n nite i toke up/
freeing my mind my soul but the time/
trying to get heard of/
big words not needed, so not used/
all samll talk, to try to hint the clues/
try to let you see thru my eyes/
of my late night filled with my quite cries/
such a tough past try to see thru it/
it wont leave me as if i did someting wrong to it/
just a couple verses i got you reading/
best belivie when i speak not one word goes with no meaning.

[Haz]

To Be Honest This is Simple But i Like it ..
I Feel Like you've Got a Good Understanding Of Stringing Lines & Words That Rhyme Together .. You Should Read Around N Try Using More Multi Syllables.. They Could Do Wonders ..

try to let you see thru my eyes/
of my late night filled with my quite cries/
such a tough past try to see thru it/
it wont leave me as if i did someting wrong to it/


I Liked This Part ..
Def Keep Writing & Improving ya Style
Looking At Others Pieces & Listening To Alot Of Real Hiphop'll Steer you in The Right Direction ..

Anyways Decent Drop homie. Keep Dropping

[justRJ]

good look on the positive. yea im kinda switching from poetry to the whole rap thing, still feeling the shit out.

[Haz]

Ahh Thats dope As Fuck , Thats how i Came up

[The Gonz]

Lacks a lot of originality due to the fact that used phrases that Kid Cudi has already used. Its like people taking songs and just altering a few words of the original lyrics and trying to pass it off as their own. I'm not saying you did that, but in a world with millions of emcees, you better bring something new to the table, not borrow other cat's words. I get it, yer a Cudi fan. But don't write Cudi music, right justRJ music. Its actually pretty hard to break the habit of writing like the artists you listen to the most, especially if they inspire you. If you're not bringing any new or original/creative ideas to the table, you're nothing more than a follower.