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A fresh, steaming pile of poo... just for you...

never known for impersonation, only smokin and burnin pages/
with quotes that burst yer face and yer brain's open to interpretation/
you know my flowin is hotta than donnin a coat in a sauna/
showin bravado? get thrown in an ocean known for pirranas/
or barricudas, too scared to scuba, i'll stare medusa/
in the hooters while tearin thru tha room with a pair of tubas/
i mean a pair of rugers, prepared to shoot and declare the loser/
stereo air polluter, the heir of the paratroopers/
the baron of dare and truth, the parent of bearin chrome/
snarin girls when they're alone once they're aware of the pheromones/
compared to a baritone, but im not known for singin tunes/
but i know a thing or two about provokin and stingin you/
i was hopin you'd bring a crew so the masses were massacred/
ive mastered the craft of words, ambassador of smackin nerds/
and attackin the last of nerves, never average or worse with rhythm/
im slashin when yer in vision, collapsin yer nervous system/
im not askin for your permission, just grabbin yer purse and splittin/
cuz the cash is worth the risk when you imagine the dirt we live in/
mad at this cursed position, so i vent to the ones around me/
i fled to another county cuz the feds will hunt the bounty/
upset cuz im drunk and drowsy, head full of stress and worries/
the rest of the mess is blurry, never slept in a bed this dirty/
im bettin you rest assured we were the best of the generation/
so expect a hesitation before we ingest this defecation/
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"or barricudas, too scared to scuba, i'll stare medusa/
in the hooters while tearin thru tha room with a pair of tubas/" LMFAO!
A Ruck-- this whole verse was hilarious... i was feelin the whole thing man. You always come wit some crazy multies... "pair of tubas" LOL!
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This was purdy dope I'm diggin' the style
the visuals were just as crazy
it also had me crackin' up got some nice multis goin' on
nice flow and very consistent keep it up
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Quit sleepin on this "shit"!
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compared to a baritone, but im not known for singin tunes/
but i know a thing or two about provokin and stingin you/


^ My fave bar

Most of this shit flow pretty well , The only thing i didnt like was

upset cuz im drunk and drowsy, head full of stress and worries/
the rest of the mess is blurry, never slept in a bed this dirty/
im bettin you rest assured we were the best of the generation/
so expect a hesitation before we ingest this defecation/



Just seems on a lower level then the rest of it.
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this was good. i dont think ive seen this style of verse from you before. i prefer your "real life" shit better but this was still way better than average. you had some nice nice punches and a good sense of humour. there were no hiccups. it read smooth the whole way through
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that was fire. good shit.
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i was hopin you'd bring a crew so the masses were massacred/
ive mastered the craft of words, ambassador of smackin nerds/
and attackin the last of nerves, never average or worse with rhythm/
im slashin when yer in vision, collapsin yer nervous system/
im not askin for your permission, just grabbin yer purse and splittin/
cuz the cash is worth the risk when you imagine the dirt we live in/
mad at this cursed position, so i vent to the ones around me/
i fled to another county cuz the feds will hunt the bounty/


This part was ill... Nicely written..Like how the ya Content came Across


Overall This Verse Was Good..


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