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QwarterZ
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Memory Lane

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In circular motion, I imagine fate of the tested
I felt the respected, visualized what success is
traded affection with the hurt, and cold expressions
now my perspective was gold watches iced out necklaces
still dancing, Harlem Shaking, grafitti, breaking...
a fad across the nation, a world following, hating
now erryone suffers, ironically? what is poverty?
is it a possibilty, or is it fate? or pure ability?
I'm still here, never peer pressured into bullshit
claiming I changed life, got high to pull clips
nah maybe I'm goin' to far maybe I'm just thru kid...
I hate getting pulled in, plus I hate gettin' fooled with...
"I'm changing" "I'm growing" "I know who you are before you do this"
I was affected, my mic was ripped from me then defected
I wasn't free, I was disconnected, forgotten, disrespected
knocked down and laughed at, fuck me? ok then...flashback...(end)
now I'm back on my feet step'd up with my head up
I let up, but I kept moving with my palms and led up
so I rewrote my feelings into a 4 page letter


fuck I messed up.....not my best work I'm sidetracked...but keeping hope alive....

dropped some videos on youtube....StraY1200...peep em!
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Re: Memory Lane

Post by -MenaCe- »

Ya Whole drop was nice homie..your consistancy held shit down. good shit keep em comin.




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"nah maybe I'm goin' to far maybe I'm just thru kid...
I hate getting pulled in, plus I hate gettin' fooled with..."
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Re: Memory Lane

Post by eMCee Havic »

yeah this was tight nice rhyme scheme fell off a lil
but not enough to compromise the piece. still i liked it you were attempin to dig deep and it showed illy man

illy

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still dancing, Harlem Shaking, grafitti, breaking...
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"see you shouldnt be afraid of me..
you should be afraid of all the people in the streets
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