Hip Hop... Part 1

[JHaze]

So whats it mean to you is it all just a game
money, broads, cars, ballin and fame
or do you feel the rage from scars and the pain
the beat is like a cage its the walls and im chained/
put it all on the page as it falls and it drains
my pen bleeds ink like its drawn from a vein
its my life and my blood, my reflection of soul
confessions unfold with every breathe in my flow/
the mic feels right like i was destined to hold
this connection is gold let perfection explode
i perfected this mode, my levels elevated
but only some listen so the message seperated/
and that right there, is where the problem lies
if this shit isnt dead its in bed tramatized
theres a lotta common guys, and no originality
you know your flow is hopeless when your focus is a salary.
(beat cuts)
yea they focused on the cash man...
that aint me i do this shit from the heart....
they tryna set trends and im just doing me(acapella rapping)
i put my life in pen and then rhyme it to beat/
(beat starts again )
be unique with the placement, no keepin it basic
start a revolution and im reachin for greatness
resurrectin lyricism i express the clearest visions
its the best in the flesh, so the rest are here to listen/
yo all im tryina say is i aint givin in
some trends need to end then my time will begin.......

im making the beat while i write this, im thinking of switching it up completely after this part so we will see what part 2 brings, i just finished recording this part i will post that soon

[Riggz]

put it all on the page as it falls and it drains
my pen bleeds ink like its drawn from a vein
its my life and my blood, my reflection of soul
confessions unfold with every breathe in my flow/
the mic feels right like i was destined to hold
this connection is gold let perfection explode
i perfected this mode, my levels elevated
but only some listen so the message seperated/
and that right there, is where the problem lies
if this shit isnt dead its in bed tramatized

ok J, the flow is def'lee there... i'm feelin the beginning. Words were on point too. I'd have to hear the "rest" on the beat to understand where you want to go with that... look forward to hearin' the audio.

Riggz

[The Gonz]

Good shit, Haze. Nice message, good flow. A little less complex than I've seen you come. Had some good rhyme schemes. Look forward to hearing this one.

[token jesture]

i like it man, feel u can get deeper with this tho, uv only scratched the surface and i get the feeling u no it to, by this i mean uv set the verse up to allow u to really tear apart the modern hip hop scene and focus on y its collapsing etc i gather theres gunna be more verses where ur gunna do that so i guess wot im saying is needless to say
look forward to hearing this on audio keep it up man
overall i enjoyed ur flow mostly, i had no problems in reading this and even being able to flow over it myself
good lines nice wordplay etc
keep it up man peace

[JHaze]

thanks yall and yea token hit the nail on the head theres a reason this is part 1, uppin

[QwarterZ]

my pen bleeds ink like its drawn from a vein
its my life and my blood, my reflection of soul
confessions unfold with every breathe in my flow
^^^^ I was feeling those lines
it really stuck out in my head when I read this
at first when I started I thought that's all I wanted

then we had the decline which made me want to help Hip Hop
which I still try to do but no studio
no money to get beats...just me n my pen
*sigh* time to write LoL!