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Where I Stand - 2010

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I draft lyrics; I don't write gospels; that shits primitive
like fossils; in the times we livin in, only god knows
why a discriminative colossal, of awful images is infinite
the bible was written in the infant; most limited stages
of our existence, its outrageous that we still listen
it should enrage us; that this contagious fiction
wants to prison us; and make you pray with Christians
that's what religion does, its an evil dictatorship
theirs no way of escaping it, it makes me sick
imagine the men translating this ancient script
from Greek To English; mistakes in every page in it
hieroglyphics aint saying shit; jado christians are masochists
racist pricks; slavery came from these abrahamic religions
arabic fricatives, strip to Gods limits, bare witness
even ur seed is wicked, Jesus, how could they be this twisted
we place credence in a allegiance of facetious hypocrites
who seem so vicious when they solicit this non-prolific
horrific; con, the bible, not worth the paper it was written on
if I'm wrong, I will, admit it, the contradictions are terrific
I use to be far from a critic, I was a Christian with convictions
my greatest decision was to quit the religion, I hated the mission
how it created division, like the bible I made a revision
still faithful, in the way that I'm living, without an angel
i've written inspirational like plato, I doubt a fable
that is age old could make me a better person, guess I'm -- Able
to bare the heavy burden of devil worshiping - from the cradle
we are petty servants, worthless, not worth the dirt we have for farming
Virgin birth? that's a charming myth, I'd rather trust quantum shifts
in consciousness, beyond documents writ for intolerance
since an archaeologist hasn't found jesus's fossils at the bottom of a pit
I think of God as what is, the universe and all the problems with it.
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Damn... and you say that my writtens make you feel embarrassed???

This shit was on point. I had a little trouble in the beginning figuring out how you placed your rhyme schemes but I was able to get on track. Shit is just raw. The witty sarcasm, the slick multies, smooth flow, and great vocabulary make this piece truly worthy of praise. The message, while not original, is the most precise example I've seen. It's like Nas ghostwriting for Immortal Technique. Very well executed, my friend.
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It was hard to pick up the flow at the begining, but I got the hang of it as I read more into it. I really like this piece. It's on that higher intellect like how Nas does things. I liked the references to the corruption religion.

"Jesus, how could they be this twisted
we place credence in a allegiance of facetious hypocrites
who seem so vicious when they solicit this non-prolific
horrific; con, the bible, not worth the paper it was written on
if I'm wrong, I will, admit it, the contradictions are terrific
I use to be far from a critic, I was a Christian with convictions
my greatest decision was to quit the religion,"

My favorite part. I really liked this.
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Umm. Yeah. Plex, I'ma go ahead and respond to this later. I just read it probably 6 times, and I've determined that I'm too intoxicated to drop real feed on something as phenomenal as this. I apologize. I'ma hit this up later, after reading it again, and agian. Then again before I drop some real feed.


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^lol
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dope, for real man some parts in this were just nasty, like the other guys said i lost it a little at first but after that it was fine, ill shit man

the bible was written in the infant; most limited stages
of our existence, its outrageous that we still listen
it should enrage us; that this contagious fiction
wants to prison us; and make you pray with Christians
that's what religion does, its an evil dictatorship
theirs no way of escaping it, it makes me sick
imagine the men translating this ancient script
from Greek To English; mistakes in every page in it
sick^
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