MenaCe vs P.T.R-ins ( Menace wins by TKO 4-1)

[-MenaCe-]

6 Barz.
House Rules.
Verse Due:24hrs after check.
Bring Ya "A" Game!.

[P.T.R-ins]

check..lets kick it

[-MenaCe-]

Check!....G'luck Homie

[P.T.R-ins]

sorry i had to put you on wait

and tahx for waitn home..

Man
you are a menace just by your appearance
you should go back to school and learn to write your sentences/
Ehhh
your best lines are so hard and fucking tight
if you use em to fuck,you'll STAY virgin to the end of your life/
Now
people talk about you bitin rhymes!!!but i dont say you do
cuz i know you not smart enough-that kind of shits to do/
A rap king?lol
someone was joking and putted that above your head
cuz if you are AN lyricist then hip hop is really dead /
Cuz
man you are so homo!! and your ass is easy to crack
in a meter of facts you should be called *JUST JACK*/
End
so any awkward rhymes you *THINK* will not bother-me
cuz your shit just dont swim!! it flow like dead *MAN AT SEE*/

-- Wed Oct 07, 2009 2:30 am --

need to do expo in case someone dont remember or dont know---that homo from will and grace (TV SHOW) call him self just jack

[-MenaCe-]

Listen!!



This kid must be jokin provokin my kind when i'll take ya life and Auction it Out..
Quit Rap! Skills you lack you'll "slip threw the cracks" like change that falls in the couch!!..
So quik it'll be too late by the time you catch a feel of what you shoulda Been..
And in this ocean there's no hope when you'll drown fast like a fat kid that Couldn't Swim!!..
So just take the loss as a pure lesson in this field full of an Arsenal of Weaponry..
Fuck ya kid and tha farther of his legacy! Ya pops left the Best Part of You on tha Leather Seats!!..
Its so sad this old man can't even connect with the rest of us he's Dyin to Fit In..
You lied just to get in! you'll see me hold his "head Down" longer like the evil side of a Christian!!..
A bit forced you say well at this point the shit really doesn't make a Difference See..
Simply cause this Snitch is Weak and he can never "eat Shit" like a bitch wit Missin Teeth!!..
I'll piss on his history if there even is any lemme dig in the Archives that Shows..
U never stand strong and the only time he's got it "hands On" is workin Part time at Lowes!!..

[J-I-R]

P.T.R.

you are a menace just by your appearance
you should go back to school and learn to write your sentences/
ehhh that was really weak to me
Ehhh
your best lines are so hard and fucking tight
if you use em to fuck,you'll STAY virgin to the end of your life/
was that a compliment? haha just kiddin.. I just didnt like that line very much
Now
people talk about you bitin rhymes!!!but i dont say you do
cuz i know you not smart enough-that kind of shits to do/
uhmmmmm really? sorry kid but that was really lame
A rap king?lol
someone was joking and putted that above your head
cuz if you are AN lyricist then hip hop is really dead /
well I see where you were goin but it just didnt land very well
Cuz
man you are so homo!! and your ass is easy to crack
in a meter of facts you should be called *JUST JACK*/
"meter of facts"? isn't that supposed to be MATTER of facts? but this was still kinda funny
End
so any awkward rhymes you *THINK* will not bother-me
cuz your shit just dont swim!! it flow like dead *MAN AT SEE*/
ummm i dont even know if that was an actual punch.. kind of a weak drop kid

MenaCe

This kid must be jokin provokin my kind when i'll take ya life and Auction it Out..
Quit Rap! Skills you lack you'll "slip threw the cracks" like change that falls in the couch!!..
lol kinda funny
So quik it'll be too late by the time you catch a feel of what you shoulda Been..
And in this ocean there's no hope when you'll drown fast like a fat kid that Couldn't Swim!!..
boo didnt like that
So just take the loss as a pure lesson in this field full of an Arsenal of Weaponry..
Fuck ya kid and tha farther of his legacy! Ya pops left the Best Part of You on tha Leather Seats!!..
bahahaha thats funny
Its so sad this old man can't even connect with the rest of us he's Dyin to Fit In..
You lied just to get in! you'll see me hold his "head Down" longer like the evil side of a Christian!!..
kinda funny
A bit forced you say well at this point the shit really doesn't make a Difference See..
Simply cause this Snitch is Weak and he can never "eat Shit" like a bitch wit Missin Teeth!!..
it's funny that you put in there that it's forced haha
I'll piss on his history if there even is any lemme dig in the Archives that Shows..
U never stand strong and the only time he's got it "hands On" is workin Part time at Lowes!!..
if this was a personal or something I didnt get it


vote = MenaCe


for obvious reasons

[-MenaCe-]

1-0 Menace...Uppin!!

[Deciple]

You both dropped very well.. i like some of PTR lines but i also liked some of menace lines.. but i think imma have to give this one to PTR..

[P.T.R-ins]

i agree wit deciple
1-1

[Haz]

Punches : Menace
Flow : Menace
Structure : Menace
Creativity: No1
Wordplay: Menace
Multis : Menace


Vote - Menace ..

[-MenaCe-]

2-1...Uppin!

[TekniQ]

Ok, before I even get started with your verse, PTR, understand
that the bullshit name spelling thing was A) Done very poorly
on your part, and B) Went out with tighty whities sometime back
in the 80's. I almost want to take points away from you for that
junk, but I wont. With that said, here's my breakdown:


you are a menace just by your appearance
you should go back to school and learn to write your sentences/

2/10 - It doesn't rhyme. The punch is weak, and you recommended
that he go back to school, when your grammar is terrible as well.

your best lines are so hard and fucking tight
if you use em to fuck,you'll STAY virgin to the end of your life/

1/10 - This is a battle and you complimented him in the first line.
No reason to comment on the rest. Punch kid, punch!

people talk about you bitin rhymes!!!but i dont say you do
cuz i know you not smart enough-that kind of shits to do/

3/10 - At least you tried to punch here. It didn't make sense. I
thought after reading the 1st line, it might go somewhere...

someone was joking and putted that above your head
cuz if you are AN lyricist then hip hop is really dead /

3/10 - It's a punch, just a weak one. Is English a second language?
Either you speak something else, or you need to read a book. I
don't mean to offend you, but if you don't speak fluent English,
it's going to be hard to win a battle on an English speaking site.

man you are so homo!! and your ass is easy to crack
in a meter of facts you should be called *JUST JACK*/

3/10 - Another really weak punch. I can't really say any more.

so any awkward rhymes you *THINK* will not bother-me
cuz your shit just dont swim!! it flow like dead *MAN AT SEE*/

3/10 - First line was garbage, second line was probably your best
attempt at a decent punch.


Notes: Keep practicing man, and work on your English grammar. All
of those spelling errors and senseless lines are killin' your
chances at winning a battle here. And remember to punch. Hard.


Menace ---

This kid must be jokin provokin my kind when i'll take ya life and Auction it Out..
Quit Rap! Skills you lack you'll "slip threw the cracks" like change that falls in the couch!!..

6/10 - Not bad. A litty choppy and the concept is somewhat played.

So quik it'll be too late by the time you catch a feel of what you shoulda Been..
And in this ocean there's no hope when you'll drown fast like a fat kid that Couldn't Swim!!..

5/10 - It hit, but there's a lot of filler and again, the concept is played.

So just take the loss as a pure lesson in this field full of an Arsenal of Weaponry..
Fuck ya kid and tha farther of his legacy! Ya pops left the Best Part of You on tha Leather Seats!!..

5/10 - This is way too forced, imho.

Its so sad this old man can't even connect with the rest of us he's Dyin to Fit In..
You lied just to get in! you'll see me hold his "head Down" longer like the evil side of a Christian!!..

7/10 - Much better. Decent punch. Nice wordplay.

A bit forced you say well at this point the shit really doesn't make a Difference See..
Simply cause this Snitch is Weak and he can never "eat Shit" like a bitch wit Missin Teeth!!..

3/10 - Forced, again. And why would a chick missing teeth eat shit? Why would anybody eat shit?

I'll piss on his history if there even is any lemme dig in the Archives that Shows..
U never stand strong and the only time he's got it "hands On" is workin Part time at Lowes!!..

7/10 - Nice finisher. The first line is a little forced but still fairly strong. Second line is nice.



Notes: I'm not sure what you have and haven't been criticized on, so I'll keep it short. Your bars
are a little bit stretched causing your flow to get choppy at spots. It's possible to keep a smooth
flow with stretched bars but it's not easy. Your punches are decent but you should stay away from
the played out concepts as much as possible. Try tossing some personals/nameplay in, in place of the
forced stuff. It's easy to squeeze stuff in if you're going to stick with a stretched style, just
make sure it connects well.


Overall: Not a terrible battle, but obviously one sided. PTR has a lot of work to do. Keep practicin,
both of you, and you should be tossin heat in no time.

My Vote: Menace

[-MenaCe-]

3-1 Uppin!


Thnx for the break Down Saw.

[Dead Silence]

v/menance

ptr ur verse was terrible. do not feel like breaking shit down. both verses have to be worthy of it.

take it or leave it

[-MenaCe-]

4-1 Menace Wins by TKO