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A Fuckin' Nut Case

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Yo this shit is written to the beat from american psycho 2 by d12, i was just fuckin around at first but this might turn into mixtape material.


You see this man plottin shit?, watch for the apocalyse
Im rockin' this, blazin ya, crazier does not exist
my hypothesis is since all I got is this
if i have to blast I'ma stop and drop a bitch
i go straight for the brain, oblongatas gettin split
Im no novice to this shit, a master is at work
with a passion for smashin these rappers into dirt
a deadly combination because im savage n berserk
a scheme for domination just imagine if it works
agreein' to a leader who's so nasty that it hurts
shit id rather be the worst, go nuts and chase faggits
guzzlin' straight gasses and clutchin eight matches
not a basket case im a fuckin case basket
tryna unstrap the straps to his fuckin straight jacket
i need to just chill, couple pills and lit some herb
the illest wit my words i could kill em in a verse
you dont feel it? the realness, the realest can get served
the last on the field, blood spillin' on the turf
but this villian will emerge, no matter his condition
he's grinin' with a smurk cuz he massacred his mission
all you have to do is listen I come at em wit precision
im snappin' on these tracks slurrin' acid as im spittin
no compassion for my victims i'm just laughin' as i kick em
Yo its pop after pop like the last of my prescription
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Re: A Fuckin' Nut Case

Post by complexity »

I don't have time for detailed feedback.

Seems to go pretty well to the beat and I think this was real solid.
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Re: A Fuckin' Nut Case

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This was pretty nice. Good flow, had some smooth multies and rhyme schemes. Nothing too crazy or complex, but not simplistic. I enjoyed the second half of the verse more than the first. Wasn't really feeling the first rhyme scheme as much, but it got better as it progressed. Good shit, man. Wish you were more active than the standard 'leave feed and drop new shit'.
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thanks for the feed guys, uppin
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Re: A Fuckin' Nut Case

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Good shit went to the beat nice...

Wordplay was nice also good job!
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