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-- On The Kill'n Field --

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Keep The Enemy Close-Turn Em Comatose Like Paraplegics
Strategic In War Sequence-Squeez'n Blood Til They Mimic Anemics
Inner Demons Are Scream'n-Release'n My Hate Thru Vengeance
Love Is An Obsolescence In Me-Will Never Pray For Repentance
Still God's Presence Is Embedded In Dreams-See'n The Holy Ghost
Haunt'n The Words I Composed When My Nights Were Diagnosed
With Fear N Loss Of Hope-Search'n For The Closest Path Home
But Turn'd Psychopath In The Shadow Cast'd By The Devil's Own ...
Advocate-With Wrath, I'll Spit Ballistics-Hitt'n Their Frontal Lobes
Like How Guns Explode-I'll Raise Death Statistics 'Round The World
Murderous Linguistics Are Told When A Lunatic Lyricist Emerges
From Depths To Earn The Respect As A Warrior With Deadly Urges
To Scorch Fields With My Battle Torches-There'll Be No Remorse
As I Trudge Forth On This Course-Strictly Kill'n With Force
Verse For Verse-I Perverse Minds-Reverse Ya'll Mental States
I'm Detrimental-Never Accidental When Hurt'n Temple Plates
A Warrior Til The End Of Days-Send'n Mortals To Their Graves
Burn'n Remains So There's No Souls Left For God To Save
Til Only Flames Blaze The Kill'n Fields-Victory Worn As Seal'd
Upon My Chest It's Reveal'd-On Strong Along The Warrior Shield !
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Re: -- On The Kill'n Field --

Post by Darth Vader »

yo i'm feelin this and giving you mad credit for the broad vocab. one of my favorite hits on this joint was the one you started with:

Keep The Enemy Close-Turn Em Comatose Like Paraplegics
Strategic In War Sequence-Squeez'n Blood Til They Mimic Anemics

Homey that shit is ill, was feelin that one. Your style is science and that was some ill lab work.

What kind of beat can you see yourself spittin that to? Keep the tempo east side and it'll flow nice, I spit it to some old lox beat it came out bangin.

Keep spittin homey n check some of my joints sometime.

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Re: -- On The Kill'n Field --

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the black writin is kinda annoyin tho
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Re: -- On The Kill'n Field --

Post by The Gonz »

This was alright. I didn't think the vocab was that stellar. It was above par, but nothing so complex to warrant mentioning any further. The flow was pretty solid. I think the multies could have been better, the rhyme schemes were off in some spots. I don't know how you talk, but Lobes and World don't rhyme. I think it was a solid piece, but there are still some kinks that could be worked out to make it better. And yes, the bold font gives me a headache too lol. Had some good lines here and there though.
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