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~Symbolikull~
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my first whole track witta hook
i'll smack yuh with rage i force multis outta my ass to the page
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the hook aint bad but it aint great
better than i can do
the first verse lyrics was nice
ya flowed the beat well
a lil dim in sum places
also a lil bit choppy sum times
the quality was pretty good
overall a nice song
coulda been better but better than what i'm puttin up so
congrats on that pretty dope shyt
keep'em comin
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hook was ass homie... was that already on the beat???? wtf??? lol dude we'll have to get together n do another one homie!!! when i get back home dude its on!!!!
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beat's pretty sik.

uhh oh that hook is off timing ...

first verse has some good flo lycs are str8
nd hooks too ..
2nd verse started off a lil shaky but ya pik it back up ..
probly wanna work on that..but
3rd hooks better..
3rd verse lyrically sounded above the rest..IMO

not bad dawg..keep it goin...
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