" Keeping Calm In The Face Of Calamity "

[Brah-Vo]

[align=center]Burning written emotions
and placing spent cigarettes
in a crystal clear ash tray
Reaching for my heart strings
which hold no disposition
As falling stars leave me worried and sick

No harm is done in the innocence of your mind
Tragedy sparks a fire that consumes
your smile while your eyes are closed

Scrambling for the bare essentials
of sustenance, shelter and water to drink
my thirst is left unslated and my face unscathed
in light of the razors that you loved so dear
my closest friends? jealousy and malice
bitterness knocks on my door every now and then
why is the damsel always in distress..
when i'm the one that's screaming for help
i always saw you as my princess charming
But you always break the camera lense
Because memories always haunt you
don't they? my princess charming.

A black ski mask holding no regard
hiding a false facade and a lie
Cursing to the sky, blaming your sin
left with discontent and a sour rainbow
testing and pushing a wall erected
Drawing portraits with your fingernails
Creative hands masterfully manipulated
in shapes to cause objects to fall, fall, fall
in the chasm of your conscience.
You draw something else...

A Gun
the cold steel splintering skin cells
hidden beneath a lying smile and an open mind
casting a shadow which provides a broken answer
to a lonely soul
the person holding it to my head
can sing just like you
bearing eyes with a piercing gaze
which whisks me away
If death were so beautiful...
why are we so afraid to fall asleep?
This darkness doesn't feel like home
Not at all.

Your mocking voice echoes
in the acoustics of my room
But I can't bring myself
To turn up the volume on my stereo.[/align]

[Haz]

You Want My Honest OPinion ..

I Think You Tried Waaaay To Hard To Make This A 'Complex Poem'
Way To Hard.. It Didnt Have It's Natural Flow..
I Liked Certain Parts, But I Feel Like You Have More Potential
Then To Drop This..
Now I Know U Prolly Think This Is Your Best To Date,
Thats Yours Opinion.. I'm Just Saying You've Written Nicer Shit..
So Keep It Up.. I Caught On 2 The Piece..

Try To Loosen Up When You Write Your Next Poem..
Have a Real Natural flow..

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[Glamtrash]

Because it's one in the morning, anything I write will be short and sweet. This deserves more. I'll get back to you lol.

[Brah-Vo]

Lookin forward to it dub .
thanks for honest feed too haz. Always appreciate that.