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lmfao
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thats sick!
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soooo siiick
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Post by Logic »

like you blowing your nut after someone gives you some constructive criticism?
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^maybe not blowing a nut
but i personally feel like i hurt him a bit.

I dk maybe its just me.
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If either of you think that I have hurt feelings over some stupid feedback, then you're both bigger ass-clowns than I thought. lol
Don't let your ego's get ahead of either of you. lmao
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Post by Haz »

Dood ...
Dead Silence Isn't Givin Constructive Critism..
I've Noticed Him Tryna BAIT Kurse Like Crazy Lately
Sort Of Like Wayne Did To Jay..
Just Talkin A Whole Lotta Garbage Cause He's High Or somethin
Trust Me Man , The Kid's Hurt...
Either It's Cause Kurse N Yall Clown Him
Or Something Along Those Lines...

The Kid's Fronting..

Lmao @ There & Here...
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Post by Dead Silence »

^
uh wtf are you talking about?
sit down

and Kurse:
i was playing when i said that.

and TGYH:
when i see a rhyme i say it to myself
and it diddnt rhyme
say outloud a few times
than tell me
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Ok 1st Of All i Wouldn't Knock Dead Silence And His Opinion Just Because He's Not as Good as u. Fans Make The Artist Too And Most Rap Fans Couldn't Spit Anywhere Near as Good as Someone They Listen To, But Their Criticism is Still important Because They're Gnna Be Buying ur Shit at The End Of The Day. That Said ur Never Gnna Float Everyone's Boat With a Track No Matter How Good it is.

Yeah id Say This Track isn't in ur Top 10, Some Parts i Felt And Some i Didn't. This is One Of Those Tracks Where u Can Say a Million Things And u Kinda Just Fly in Every Direction Touching On Shit. Good Thing is ur Strongest Point (imo) is Getting ur Point Across Quickly And Effectively (Which is Something u NEED To Be Successful at Audio).

i Don't Even Need To Mention Delivery, Once it's Natural it's Natural. Flow Was Fine And u Changed it in a Few Places, But Sometimes The Transitions Were a Little Forced. For Example:

My street cred's solid, thats a fact..
and though I'm not signed yet, I'ma keep workin on that.

You're 7 years old presently..
impressively...like me intellectually.

i Mean it Still Flowed With The Beat But Sounded Really Jerky Coming From Such a Different Flow So Fast. There Were Quite a Lot Of Quotables And i Felt u Explained The Whole Grandad Part Best (Double Edged Sword Shit). Some Lines Were a Tad Cliche But For The Most Part it Was Fresh. Once Again, Far From ur Best But With Over 150 Tracks it's Gnna Be Tougher To Keep Upto Par With Yourself.
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AKA SCOTCH HALL, MOE MEIJER & MOMEIJAH.
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Post by Kurse »

TGYH...obviously can understand what I'm talkin about and can tell I'm obviously not dick-hurt over an opinion. lol
...not only that, but how can't "HERE" and "THERE" not sound alike!? It's the same word, only with 1-letter seperating them. (T)HERE (the word 'there' is technically the word 'here' with the exception that it has a "T" infront lol)

Haz...I dunno if he's tryin to bait me. I don't really think he is, but whatever it is he's trying to do (if anything at all) it's kinda hard to decipher at the moment.

Dom...yea I agree, that certain parts might've seemed a bit jerky, but you're right...they still flowed. They just seemed a bit "out of water" the way I switched up the flow suddenly. I use it as a different form of emphasis to keep shit interesting, but meh...not everyone catches onto that right away. But that's what I was trying to explain to Dead, is that it flowed...it just didn't land where he might've expected it to.
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Post by Dead Silence »

well when u say Hurr and Thurr
of course it doese
but if u say it the way its suppose to be pronounced
it doesnt

i dk maybe its just me
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Post by TreTru »

well i liked the track all around..

the beat had alot of feelin to it..i lik those melodic beats..

hook was nice..again i feel with songs like these the multi's and
stuff arent really necessary..i mean it's good to use them but you
dont wanna over do it..IMO

verses were str8..ya mixx is alway's pretty good.
and again a concept like this is all about you and
emotion and delivery are real important ..you did that..
lyrically this was good imo..

rhymin is about timing with audio and that's what DS doesnt get..obviously
listenin to his tracks..haha..

rhymes are normally built around vowels cause vowels carry a longer syllable count...accept the R and Y..they carry a longer count so it depends how
technical you wanna be about it....FYI though IMO DS seems like he's bein a DIK about it cuz that rhyme is universally accepted..haha.
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