just a ramble

[superior]

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/every ... tml#113021

i have no mic, i rap to a sword
cuz i'm a knight, who fights the world
i ride the flow, like it's my mount
i go for blood, but 'm no count
my tales of the crip, you can't re-count
if you enter my castle, you can't sneak out
or creep out, and no sound you make, will ever leak out
cuz when your in my space, no one can hear you scream
when we stand face to face, you can't doubt i'm supreme
my skill is, an ill niss, like a drop in dopamine
I spit grimey shit, yet my breath stays pristine
I'm a human paradox, my logic stinks like dirty socks
but i won't be brain washed, you could get your brain squashed
don't see a drain?, then the floor remains, awash
with thoughts, drenched in your memories
they coat the ground like emery, on the paper, in my pad
in my pocket, in my pants.i'll never loose it, cuz i never dance
I've never had to start a fight, yet i've never left my battle stance
I don't live life by happenstance, and i leave nothing up to chance
I've seen the future, i know it all, i Know when nations rise and fall
I know just who the rappers call, when record sales begin to stall
I have the information, to fight the infestation, of those of you who hatin'
I'm ready and willing, but now i'm waiting. for those on high to stop debating
on who's the greatest, and who is slated to take the throne
and don the robes.
the king is here, yet no one knows
because i donned the cloak, so i could take the globe.

In a way this is an extension to waynes "blucka blucka" freestyle. i started it right after hearing that.

[Haz]

You Have A Understandin Of Metaphors
Try To Use Multi Syl's...
Try To Even Out your Lines So you Have a Steady Flow.
If You Stick Around N Keep Droppin you'll Elevate
No One's Tupac Or Cormega In One Day Feel Me..
So Keep Goin Homie.

[superior]

thanks for the feedback. my vocabulary has a big gap in it. i know a lot of complex and simple words but putting them together is hard for me

[Haz]

My Advice Is .
Dont Try Hard To Put Them Together,
Cause When you Try Hard It Comes Out Forced Or Just Out Of Place..
Just Go With The Flow Homie,

For Multis..

Check Out...

Drops From,

Me
Complexity
R.Son.All
Cee4
Arvincible

N Many More..

All Different Techniques With Multi's As Well...
Just Focus On More Complex Rhyme Schemes...
One Buildin Block At a Time..

[TreTru]

this was a decent drop fam..not spectacular but it flowed decent IMO..
would make an aight audio probably.. just keep droppin..more people
will feed you as you get better...keep doin you.