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eMCee Havic
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Post by eMCee Havic »

give me your strings puppet..
and follow my fingers every move
you the reason why people starving
and in need of food
and if you need some proof
ill show u what these strings ll do
follow my lead
and see what i'll bring you too
cause with your every move
im plotting 2 ahead
got my left finger twitchin
so you scratch your head
yes thats right
you the slave and i'm the master
i'll command you followe
striaght into a disaster
too long to me you've been plastered
so i shake you off
and watch you fail in my laughter
cause remember you never where real
a puppet you nothing
you where made of my Zeal



just a key of sorts concept shootin or whatever you want to call it

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ugly
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Post by ugly »

i was diggin dis piece's concept, felt to me it was close to poetry and furthur from rap. I cant really pick a favorite bar cuz they was all equal, and I see how you can improve and how some lines braught you down.

you the slave and i'm the master
i'll command you followe
striaght into a disaster
too long to me you've been plastered

this was good for me rite here, it was strong but could have been worded better. Also your spelling at times is off.

overall: 4/10
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