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quick verse i done today, feedback appreciated
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quick verse i done today, feedback appreciated
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dope beat
the lyrics were str8
the hook was pretty good too
maybe need a lil bit more emotion
an try to work on ya flow
i can tell u normally spit quicker than this cus
u jus could'nt fit the flow perfectly
u r improvin tho so props on this track
keep'em comin
the lyrics were str8
the hook was pretty good too
maybe need a lil bit more emotion
an try to work on ya flow
i can tell u normally spit quicker than this cus
u jus could'nt fit the flow perfectly
u r improvin tho so props on this track
keep'em comin
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Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect
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peepin now....
like tha beat, deff feel like u need som mo emotion like som1 said b4... hook on this beat iight 2... iight this was deff a lil short like shrty said up top, but my suggestion is write a couple more verses n rerecord this joint n try puttin sommo emotion in it 2 doggy... also, try sayin sompthin or som shit in tha hook n toss in a intro so ppl git a feel wat ya joints bout ta b like (sompthin ta build up ta ya vere homie)....
theres my 2cents, hope it helps...
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like tha beat, deff feel like u need som mo emotion like som1 said b4... hook on this beat iight 2... iight this was deff a lil short like shrty said up top, but my suggestion is write a couple more verses n rerecord this joint n try puttin sommo emotion in it 2 doggy... also, try sayin sompthin or som shit in tha hook n toss in a intro so ppl git a feel wat ya joints bout ta b like (sompthin ta build up ta ya vere homie)....
theres my 2cents, hope it helps...
1hundo
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nice beat the mellow vibe..ya presence is wayy better then the
last tracks i heard from you...for real..
the delivery is pretty good on this one..man..lyrically it's
nice..everything fit..i'm diggin the sample..just
drop that second verse ...and ya golden..
last tracks i heard from you...for real..
the delivery is pretty good on this one..man..lyrically it's
nice..everything fit..i'm diggin the sample..just
drop that second verse ...and ya golden..
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Alright I'm back to leave feed.
So let's start with the beat by Hygrade.
Personally...he's done alot better beats, this is one of the weaker ones he made in my opinion. Which is pretty sad because it's sampled from such a classic oldie originally done by Atlantic Star.
He could've done the drums differently and mapped out some better base play to really bring out a nicer impact for the song, but unfortunately (coming from an oldies fan)...he failed to deliver on that.
Mixing wise...you still need to find a way to clean alot of your vocals up as well as flush your vocals with the beat.
Concept isn't bad. It's been done, so whenever you recycle a concept, you need to find a way to make it your own and seperate yourself from the previous crowd. Seeing how this is only 1 verse long...you didn't allow yourself enough time to do that.
Lyrically this isn't bad. I likes some of the things you had to say which is what made this drop as pleasent as it waa. Lil rough around the edges, but you're still goin steady.
Keep droppin bruh!
So let's start with the beat by Hygrade.
Personally...he's done alot better beats, this is one of the weaker ones he made in my opinion. Which is pretty sad because it's sampled from such a classic oldie originally done by Atlantic Star.
He could've done the drums differently and mapped out some better base play to really bring out a nicer impact for the song, but unfortunately (coming from an oldies fan)...he failed to deliver on that.
Mixing wise...you still need to find a way to clean alot of your vocals up as well as flush your vocals with the beat.
Concept isn't bad. It's been done, so whenever you recycle a concept, you need to find a way to make it your own and seperate yourself from the previous crowd. Seeing how this is only 1 verse long...you didn't allow yourself enough time to do that.
Lyrically this isn't bad. I likes some of the things you had to say which is what made this drop as pleasent as it waa. Lil rough around the edges, but you're still goin steady.
Keep droppin bruh!
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