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Sound Smuggla

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http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/rando ... tml#112082

alrite everyone i'm new to the site so just a little drop for my introduction.

Sound smuggla manifested born n raised on this tarmac/
street dwella fella n i pray this where my hearts at/
hard act to follow when i wallow in these dreamscapes/
too much dirty shit surrroundin me to make a clean break/
n these fakes wanna take me under n they wonder why/
im ready just to cross the line screamin man its do or die/
you or i, you decide, suicide theres no escape/
everythin you do or say is used to hallucinate/
movin weight , border crossin money on ya mind/
mind on ya money aint it funny livin blind/
never mind, sever ties burnin bridges to the ground/
tearin smiles away from clowns in a chase for the pounds/
n i found - illumination losin patience rapidly/
members of my faculty - as mad as some hatters be/
actually we dastardly - bastards of the worst kind/
aint afraid to work time if you try n hurt mine/
search, find nothin in this coffin of heartache/
the lonesome vagabond leadin the car chase/
stars race, fire boomin loomin in the sky/
dont let me fall now man ya ruinin my high...........

look forward to your response.....1
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Post by Cuttin P »

Yoooo the flow was outstanding. The content was cool. Ya rhymes were nicely done. Liked the inner rhymes in ya bars too. Overall hot shit man! We should collab
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thanks for the kind words man n if you do wanna collabo just get at me.
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Post by TreTru »

nice homey..it's got good audio flow..i'm sure..i'm into the the
inner outer' rhymes too..i was feelin the flow more than the concept
though IMO..the lyrics were real str8 overall i'd say this was a good introduction..
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Post by Phasewon »

this was a nice demonstration of fundamental skill, the flow was on point, the rhyme scheme was on point, everything was dope, no complaints, stay at it.
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good looks people....1
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