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http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/lost- ... 12473.html

Hopefully i understand rules and am doing everything right so i am just posting this so i can jump into the batlles.......


let me introduce myself im JDough,
dont get it twisted i dont Play Doe,
cause really i dont care what you say ho,
i leave these bitches stiff like stayflo,
and my rhymes dont fall off i got that stay-flo,
jus gimme a topic sit back and say go,
then watch me destroy tha thread like a tornado,
got hatas actin like ghosts and they jus lay low,
and im moving more weight than essays with cars that say IN TOW,
cold killas cock and loaded rdy to bust when i say so, need i say mo, i didnt think so!
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Post by ugly »

cooh for a freestyle mane, but yea u str8 as long as u feed on somones topic first then u could drop.
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Post by ugly »

ohhh and theres a cypher for freestyling so drop ur freestyles there iight
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ok

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well the rules somewhere said i had to post here b4 i could battle and since i dont know any good recipes for cookies i kicked a few bars lol main i crack myself up
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Post by GrimBlaze »

It was ok for a freestyle i guess but you should maybe try to up the vocab and some multis would really tighten it up as opposed to just rhyming the end of each bar. internal rhyme schemes hit harder and grab my attention more.
still, keep droppin...1
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Post by Cuttin P »

This was okay... not too impressive and I can get the vibe that u was just kickin rhymes not tryin too hard or whatever, but remember 1st impressions are a lasting one. And since u dropped this... any real illness u drop will seem suspect and/or a fluke.
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A fluke dude u crazy

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check this thread out if u wanna c my battlin abilities
sorry not tryin to plug

http://www.offthaave.com/forums/showthread.php?t=23195
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man already on my nerves

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ugly wrote:cooh for a freestyle mane, but yea u str8 as long as u feed on somones topic first then u could drop.
aight em if u can read i did post on a topic first the link is in my post dipshit any ur title say rookie jus like mine im guessin you not admin
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Re: man already on my nerves

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JDough wrote:
ugly wrote:cooh for a freestyle mane, but yea u str8 as long as u feed on somones topic first then u could drop.
aight em if u can read i did post on a topic first the link is in my post dipshit any ur title say rookie jus like mine im guessin you not admin
Damn dude...sensitive? You clearly miss read his post. He just saying that as long as you give feed, post the link that you're good to go! Cause if you didn't remember u showed some concern over rather or not u followed the rules correctly. He was sayin that u did and just simplifing it fa ya homie.

This is what u posted just before ur verse "Hopefully i understand rules and am doing everything right so i am just posting this so i can jump into the batlles......." and dudes just clarifyin for ya that ya.

So what about that makes him a dipshit?
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Post by Phasewon »

ehh, the overall rhyme scheme and and just general skill level is elementary, but the flow was on point nonetheless, just keep elevating and work on putting more thought proccess and complexity into your shits, stay up.
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lol damn

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aight my bad ugly you sho right p i did forget what i said lol
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??????

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so how do i go about finding someone to battle or do i just do a random callout??
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Yea go to the callout section in the text shit and make an open callout. Surely someone will be ready to battle too
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Post by JDough »

im not sure how to set it all up seems 2 be a lot of rules here
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