My Lullaby...

[Darth Vader]

In a world on my own, all grown but so alone,
just another lifeless drone, as I look up to His throne;
God why have you forsaken me? Where is my life taking me?
Is there no other place for me? Is there no Holy Grace for me?

The skies, they don't part for me, and He, doesn't speak to me,
this is my speechless speech you see, my only known remedy;
I can't get ahead or flee, God watches endlessly,
yet when I need to be saved, He doesn't send for me.

Why will He not bend for me? Because I never bent for him?
Because I was born into sin? Or the colour of my skin?
May as well be in a garbage bin, or a grave that's six feet deep,
maybe He'll respond to me, when I start my endless sleep.

But I'm not a mindless sheep, this can't be the end for me,
if God only listened now, He'd hear my sincerity;
He'd see what He meant to me, He'd feel how I feel right now,
He'd come help me right away, maybe if I scream real loud.

Don't I just get to be proud? Even for once in my life?
Did I ask to be myself? Or was I put here just for spite?
Maybe I did something bad, in one of my other lives;
maybe I deserve to die, this should be my lullaby.



I submitted that piece in a variety of poetry contests...your input is much appreciated. Bless.

[TreTru]

i like the concept alot..as far as poems go this was decent..
i think it ends off abruptly though..i think you didnt get to
really seal up th lullaby line ..cuz it was unsopperted in relation to
sleep..like i get the whole endless sleep is what you mean..but you
touched the concept on line 12 and never mentioned it again till
your lullaby closing rhyme..just honest feed..

i'm sure anybody else would probably say it was sweet.. aight 1