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Post by RAJE »

track i recorded recently.

my accent kinda slips out on a few words but i think it came out ok.

some feed would be appreciated.
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Post by TreTru »

uhhmm..well honest feed is it aint done yet..hahah..obviously

anyway..you'll need some kinda intro to set up the mood

the beat is decent..bangs pretty well .

the verse..flo was decent but ya presence was low on this one
ya sounded hesitant or like you thinkin hard to block your accent , or sumthin..just work on that and rerecord it clean..ohh yeah
then finish the song and your good.. dude

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Post by RAJE »

yeah that seems to be my problem... i dunno why but i can shout at the mic and still come across as quiet... need to work it out.

and i suck at intro's hooks etc... figures...

thanks for the feed tre man, taken on board so i'll try up my game next time
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Post by 3lmo »

nice rhyme but not my style
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Post by RAJE »

3lmo wrote:nice rhyme but not my style
thanks man... i think :?
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this was okay i wrote a song to this same beat
nice flow different voice from whut i expected
i'm no good at hooks either but we gotta adapt
keep'em comin
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Post by Kurse »

No Lie...that beat was straight KILL son...I'd rip that beat soooo hard if I had found it. haha
Not bad, you definately have a knack for words. Didn't really hear the accent peak thru at all...but it's not sumthin you should worry about anyway.
Like Tre said...you can hear the hesitation in certain parts when you spit. Personally I don't think it's becuz you're worried about your accent...I think it's just for the simple fact that you didn't familiarize yourself with your verse! Atleast not well enough.
Overall it's not bad. Very short...but I liked the concept. Mixing was poor but your lyrics were your shining point.
Decent drop...keep doin yo thang!
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Ha Ha..That's coo I Like The Concept, I Thought Is Was Kind Of Funny Or Like A Lil Twist When You Got To The End, You Were Pretty On Beat I'd Say...You Sound A Lot Older Than I Expected...Good Shit Man Keep It Up.
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Post by RAJE »

thanks guys,

so kurse i think i get what your saying, you mean i should practice my verse loads before i record it? gonna do a lot of writing tonight so i might get round to another verse on this. thanks for the feed, appreciate it mate.

petrafyne, why did you expect me to sound younger?

again thanks for the feedback, taking it all on board. got a few tracks in the works just now, hopefully should have at least one ready to post up before the end of next week. and now that i have permanently set up my decent recording equipment the quality of the recordings should increase as well
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Post by Petrafyne »

RAJE wrote:

petrafyne, why did you expect me to sound younger?
Because In Your Av You Look Eleven
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Post by RAJE »

Petrafyne wrote:
RAJE wrote:

petrafyne, why did you expect me to sound younger?
Because In Your Av You Look Eleven
haha nah man.
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Post by Kurse »

You don't have to have everything you spit memorized. It's okay to rap and have a notepad in hand for reference. But rely on the pad as only a crutch and not a third leg.
In other words...if you're gonna use a reference...then use it for ONLYYY a reference, don't become dependent on it.

The more you know your verse or your song. Naturally, the better you're going to spit it because having most of it commited to memory will rid your session of most hesitations and slip-ups.

Like me? I've literally recorded going onto about 150 songs. There's no way I remember all of them by heart while in the studio. But you read it over and over...spit it as many times as it takes. Pound it into your mind. Like when I do LIVE shows...that's just how you have to prepare for it. It's not like I can take my notepad onstage with me. haha
Knowledge and memory of what you write is key to part of what you do. Get into a better habit of knowing your song a little better before actually recording it and you'll always get better results.
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Post by RAJE »

thanks kurse,

one more thing, any advice on how to improve the mixing?
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Post by TreTru »

yeah Kurse is pretty much dead on about that..bein more familiar
with your verse before you record it is one of the best way's
to do it..just reciting it to beat a few times should help that..
and knowing what your rythm will be ,helps allow you too give it more swag without fallin off..dont get me wrong..sometimes me and Petrafyne
write and record right on the spot..but it's waaayyy easier to
practice it a bit first....anyway..hope this helps..1
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iight....

Post by Problemz »

how long u been doin audio for homie?
jus peeped this. i didnt read tha other feedbakk, so my badd if im repeatin... Need a good intro n outro or hook or sompthin yo. Put a lil more emotion n emphesis (or howeva u spell it, haha) in ya verse. kinda sounds like u jus readin it as opposed ta spittin it, ya feel me? Lyrically this was str8. I feel wat u sayin, but u gotta spit it how u mean it, not wrote it... all in all this was still a good drop my dude, keep doin wat it do, im out....
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