Rap trip

[3lmo]

This Track is From Last Year, its a lil Lame, thats what i was told but you all tell me what you think....

p.s.
theres one little static part in the song thats about a minute long, but please listen till the end

[Kurse]

I ain't gonna lie bro. I wasn't feelin this at all. And I'm not tryin to come off disrespectful or anything bro, but this just doesn't have any replay value at all. Lyrics were below mediocre, mixing was bad...it was hard to understand alot of parts. And this was just a very poor choice in beat. That wasn't static in the middle, that was an effect that someone threw into the beat (whoever it was that produced it).

You had too many gaps in here too. Like you just stop flowin and let the beat ride for about 4 or 6 bars and then come in again. It's too random.

Definately try to stick to sumthin soundin more mainstream becuz this was just not very applaudible in any way. (again no offense) This isn't even good for a filler song on a mixtape! All I can say is keep tryin bruh!

[Lawgix]

DUDE!!!! i totally agree with Kurse... he said it all... didn't like it at all... the beat was fuckin strange man... wtf did u find that???? sounded like what u'd hear from a cheap horror movie... iuno man i was NOT diggin it at all... NO EMOTION!!!! no swag... just like i explained in the last post dude... same shit lacks in this track too.... not tryin to be a dick... just stating the truth homie... keep doin it n u'll get it... just work on a few things man...

[K.O.]

i agree with both of them not to be hard on you im trying to be real. you had too many pauses. the beat wasn't dope at all. you should have went with something that stood out more to help your flow. it was cheesy and techno polyphonic at best. if anything use something people are familiar with. i noticed the part that hurts you the most out of your flow is your emotion. even if its old you still need more emotion in it. don't just read it off a notebook speak it spit it and feel it. without doing that you're just going to be in the same spot. reading off a notebook. work on some new shit i would like to see some changes man. don't give up just come with some more swag and a better beat and im sure the product will sound 200% better.