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Merkige .. ( Get Um a Body Bag..)

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[align=center]I Told You Son U Get The Fat Joe Treatment..
-Brother Raped In Jail
- Saucey= Drunk
- U Claim Ur High Online All The Time
- he Cried bout His Pops diein From Can-Sir!.
Fuck It No More Explanations Its Off With His Head! (


You a Song With No Promotion None Of Ya 'Hooks Hittin'..Stole My Style U Jus a Dead Crook Sittin...
I'm Plottin While ya Rooks Shiftin...A Lyrical Verse Is 'Odda Cee' Like Tha Book Writtin..
You'll 'Stop Breathin Infront Tha Cock' Like a Asthmetic Skank..My Reel's Shiftin I'ma Let It Crank...
Don't Claim To Be King N Regret It Hank.. Even Though Ya Notebooks Labeled A 'Ceptic Tank'...
I'm Airin Ya Out It'll Cause ya Pipes Ta Flop..U Got Brotherly Love You Must Like Tha Cock..
U a Regular Plane How U a 'Fighta Twat?' Criminal? Judgin By ya 'Wrap Sheet' U Got 'Writas Block!'..
Get Cha 'Back Up' I Know Ur Seekin Spleen, U Mus Make Dogs Itch The Way U 'Fleein Scenes'..
Clownin On Ya Brotha Got Me Seein Steam, I'm 'Take U Out This War' It Aint a Honorable 'Discharge' If U Leakin Green..(Gonarea!)
This Cat Needa just 'Give It Up' Like a Drunken Whore..Who Hasnt 'Got To Saw Cee' We've All Been Drunk Before!..
U Gunna Pay a Cold Toll Chump...Haz 'Seen Yer Garbage' Like A Old Folks Dump!...
I'ma Send This Guy Ta Da Light..What He Lyin Is Tight? Nah That's Loose Pussy He'll Get Fried In a Slight..
Minute..Completely..Finished..He's Tryin Ta Fight!..What Kinda Dood Does Coke Just 2 Be HIGH ON A SITE...? ( Answer That )..
Him Beatin Me Is Questionable N I'm OUT FA ANSWERS..Murda Me? Ya Fathers illness Skips a Generation I DOUBT YA CAN..SIR!...
Da Arm'z Im Tolkin'll Leave ya Arma Smokin..Pawn Ya Soakin In Tears Cause Plex Called You Out ON YA VOTIN! ..
Stinakz Lives in Ya City Yes, U Talked About Um Once He Left..Sissys Get..No Pitty Pest!...
If Meta Tha Demon Comes Back You Gunna Get Scared, Would You Be The 'Champion' If Jay Gunna Was Here?!?! ( Answer That)
I Laugh Ya Wortliss Shit, i'll Merk Ya Script..Gloves Grippin The Bush How You Gunna Hurt Me PRICK?..
Rell Memba When Cee Was Hatin On Nameplay? Now Its In Every VERSE HE SPIT! Plus Its All Forced..Unworthy Shit..
You Went From a 'God Of War' To a AVERIGE MAN, Every Crew Collab U Were Outshined Your Fuckin GABBIGE FAM...
Your Orginal? That Makes No SENSE BUM! Like We Aint Notice U Tried Ta Use Duce's Own Style AGAINST UM!...
They Like Haz Chill..Nah I Aint CALM YET..I'ma Clear This Shit Up Like a Phoned Bomb Threat...
Rell And Kurse Dropped Somethin..Then U Dropd 'Swagga Like Cee' U Cant Up With ya OWN CONCEPTS?!?!
Sun Hittin The Oceans When C-SHINES!..I'ma 'Choke This Cat' Like a Tight Colla Around a FEE LINE...
U Aint Gotta Six Sense With Rhymez How Can U SEE MINE? All My Wins R From Rooks Or Duds..Funny I BEAT YOU THREE-TIMES!...
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Post by - Mutual - »

shyt this was very good Haz
i loved some of the punches
the multies stayed on point an hit well IMO
the flow maybe was a lil bit choppy but that maybe jus me

Rell Memba When Cee Was Hatin On Nameplay? Now Its In Every VERSE HE SPIT! Plus Its All Forced..Unworthy Shit..
You Went From a 'God Of War' To a AVERIGE MAN, Every Crew Collab U Were Outshined Your Fuckin GABBIGE FAM...

^that line aint really that funny an yet it seemed to stick in my head
keep'em comin Haz
i hope Cee returns wit sum fire
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Post by Cee4 »

lol i just found out my dad died of cancer!!

yeah he had it ages ago but hes still alive
i want my inheritance money!

the diss was ok..lol im still waiting on the fat joe treatment
i also find it funny that your personals consist of the fact that i get drunk and take coke.
lol its saturday night...guess what im gonna go do now..
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Post by TreTru »

good shyt dude..alot good punches..IMO
good flow..rhyme scheme was actually kinda live..a couple
twist and turns with the flow kept it exciting so its a good
ass drop...



Even Though Ya Notebooks Labeled A 'Ceptic Tank'...
I'm Airin Ya Out It'll Cause ya Pipes Ta Flop..U Got Brotherly Love You Must Like Tha Cock..
U a Regular Plane How U a 'Fighta Twat?' Criminal? Judgin By ya 'Wrap Sheet' U Got 'Writas Block!'..

^^i liked this punch alot..
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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

usually the last one to diss, second one to drop, ect. ect. does better due to an advantage of being able to outshine the one before, but in this case i still think cee4's drop was harder, cee's had better multis, puns, n so on, this was a little more creative with the text but nothin that stood out enough for me to clap for, overall it was alright, just expected more from all the talk that i saw goin on
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Post by Haz »

Yeah , I'm Sure Ekoms I Already Your Opinion Lmao @ "Better Puns" Dood Aint Even Have Puns In His Shit .. But Thanks 4 The Feed People .. Even The Hatefuly Feed!... ( And This Was a Piece Of The Fat Joe Treatment =) .. )
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