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Mindfuck

Post by Glamtrash »

Going through the motions
just to move through the day.
Speaking in a foreign language
full of mumble and stumble
that mimics a drunken stupor

Pieces of the inside
rot and burn away.
Yet the outside is spared the embarrassment
by being placed on the back burner.

Slipping through the crack in the wall
hiding from all form of responsibility
None for me thanks.
None for my actions,
I don't need it.

You see things
that no one in their right mind could imagine.
Pieces of memory mixed with hysteria,
delusion of the senses forces you to go insane
and lose yourself completely.

No one is coming to the rescue.
There will be no search party.
For you are all alone,
and no one knows how to find you
because they've never been here before.
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Post by Haz »

Damn.. This Was Really Good... On Some Shit..
At First I Was Gettin Into It, N It Took a Second...
But How you Finished it Was just Raw...

I Think You Came Back Hard..Piece Was Nice...
Alot Of Emotion , Thought Given Into It..It Seemed..

Anyways Good shit.. Keep Droppin
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Post by eMCee Havic »

damn that was a tight poem
i like the emotional involment in it
and you fine too so thats a bonus

lol

nice drop keep um coming
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"see you shouldnt be afraid of me..
you should be afraid of all the people in the streets
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Post by Brah-Vo »

You know a poems good when it makes you say wtf out loud .
Was really trippy for me, had to read it over a couple of times but i don't think i've taken a full grasp of it...
Not that it was written badly but moreso im abit slow haha .
On a technical level, i thought this was good and the imagery was superb... really brought out the aesthetic capabilities in your words which i always enjoy.
Nice work.
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Post by Glamtrash »

Thanks a lot guys. Work's been nuts and apparently that's my muse lol.


The feed is much appreciated =)
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Post by K.O. »

definitely an enjoyable read.
i can relate to this poem and i think everybody can in one way or another.
i look forward to droppin in the DC soon...
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Post by precise »

i like it, i been readin thru a bunch of poems tryin to grasp how they should be structured cause i want to start writin more of them


i had to read each part of this twice before movin on to the next lol, makin sure to catch everything, i like your concepts, really enjoyed that opener
"Going through the motions
just to move through the day. "
thats a pretty decent quotable

awsome stuff =D
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facin me? its mission impossible, like pickin up lesbian broads
fuck all these thespian frauds, they "bug me" like espionage
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Post by Borat »

ha! this so reminds me of my work.

utah state hospital. crazy central.
where all the happy neighbours and
angry roommates share in tunes of dysfunction.
my band of broken instruments.
mine... To mold into beautiful songs.
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Post by Lotus »

deep.... felt like that more than a few times
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