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" Patience "

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" Patience "

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Lying down, my back starts to hurt
But looking at the stars reminds me of you

They won't let us be with each other
there's always the chance of escape...
But the plane has broken wings
And my car's out of gas
I'm trying to get to you
But i don't know how

I'm climbing up a ladder just to reach you
Looking upon the horizon, where you said you'd be
I'm stepping on clouds now, But I'm falling through
Falling through, as I'm falling for you
Throw me a parachute and catch me in your arms
Girl your the only one who can save me

Will you wait for me?
I'm running as fast as i can
Tears turn dry and meaningless
My imagination begins to scare me ..
Tell me you're waiting for me
You say you don't care what they think
But do you mean it?

Patience is a virtue lost
And one I'd rather forget
You mean so much to me...
So I'd rather not wait.
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Post by |.R.SON.aLL.| »

This Was Pretty Nice IMO ..
When i Read Your Poems,
i Think U Are So Much Older Than What U are ..
But This Was Dope ..
That "Fallin" Area
Was Sick,
It Would Be Sumptin i Would Write
I Might "Sample" it Lmao JP
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Post by Brah-Vo »

Thanks for the feed rell.
Feel free to use it as a sample :P lolol

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Post by Glamtrash »

There's that potential I was talking about. I really liked this one. Rell's got a point -- You do use vocabulary far beyond your age -- which is precisely what I was trying to drive home to you. And I think you killed this.

there's always the chance of escape...
But the plane has broken wings
And my car's out of gas
I'm trying to get to you
But i don't know how


I love it. You're getting there. Keep at it.
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