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"Once a Good Girl, Gone Bad.....

Post by MagicMark »

She's Gone forever..

Probably with me... enjoying California Weather"...

chea.. swagalicious....

yo im player straight out.. i play as a beast
and the rest who aint killin' ya'll aint even players ta me..
after we wake up, she workin' on breakfast.. i say make it fa me
but yano how i roll.. she usually makin' for three (Woooooooo...)
its amazin' ta see.. how im creatin' the freaks
one facin' the skeet with the others face in the sheets..
Wow.. i dont know how i do it..
either im smarter than the average, or their average is stupid..
im as bad as they foolish, gottem' whenever i speak
when i don't call em tey go crazy.. forevers a week
but i got so many girls, im never in need..
"i said you was special baby,.. but special aint unique.."..
always wear a latex, so i never get that late text
and if i get that "late-text", its always 'i loved that lay'-text" (Woooooooooo...)
and i never pay sex, thats like payin' fa breathin'
its 12 pm.. and im already like "lets stay in this even'nin"
you know how i roll.. 2 lambo's and pearls on the jags..
and every car look like a low rider, from tha girls in tha back
i got game plus more jewels than the rest of em' kids
you could say the ice get me more pussy than an eskimo king
from the start its been said, im a god in tha bed
tha water bed looks like its been fitted with hydrolics instead
i..... get the beer, helps ta forget her fears
next thing she's like "hit me baby one more time" like britney spears

shortened this muh' on RAI's advice lol..
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i loved the swagga on this
had a type of flow really good and unique
nice rhyme scheme shit was dope
fire with the multies and was a good read
keep'em comin Mark
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Post by Quix »

Shit came off nice dog!!

Flowed ILL!


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Real Recognize Real ... who dah Fuck is you???

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its amazin' ta see.. how im creatin' the freaks
one facin' the skeet with the others face in the sheets..
Wow.. i dont know how i do it..
either im smarter than the average, or their average is stupid..
im as bad as they foolish, gottem' whenever i speak
when i don't call em tey go crazy.. forevers a week

^^^lmao ass of this shit was dope as fuck...


had me rollin, but when u started talkin about lambos i was like naw that aint him he talkin about lol
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Post by Brah-Vo »

Ahahahahaha this was nice as hell.
Even the lambo part and low rider line was nice.
This was cool
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Post by |.R.SON.aLL.| »

This Was a Pretty Koo Drop Mark ..
Tha Delivery Was On Point ..
I Can Hear U Spittin This Shit Over a Raw Beat ..
Umm .. i See U Gettin ya Lil Wayne On ..Lol
With Tha Samplin Bars ..
Thas Tha Only Part i Didn't Like ..
Other Than That it Was A Koo ass Read
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Post by Hubris »

it was straight...

except for the stolen concepts and last bar..

a britney spears punnch??

wack.


and well since u have lil wayne as ya avatar..its gonna be hard to deny that you've never heard these lyrics before.


"better wear a latex so you dont get that late text saying i am late text"- lil wayne.


just by changin ya shhit up, an extending it..you think its original??

fuq outta here.


as for the rest of the verse..like i said it was straight.

i just hope u didnt jack any other ideas or concepts.

cuz

multies were good, a lil on the simple side..but hey, this was a simple theme.

so ...
o well.


And kill ya self..if u respond..i put those bitten lines in quotes...cuz u didnt. let alone, give credit to lil wayne.


rated- low.
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