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Dont wanna do it...

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If your going to leave your opinion on this piece.. read away..

if you have no intention to.. you can kindly click the back button and look at another thread.. that concerns you...

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brought here for one thing, the dude lied for his cover
i tagged along so he wouldnt be slicin' this brother
im a steady reminder to him, one look and he knows this
try to stop him, 'in vein', but his blood already is frozen
i watch him crack his knuckles, get ready, composin'
give him time, cause its better he focused..
he roll out the benz.. while i stay behind him..
but he's too early.. dude's a head of the showin'
he's got the head of a poet, watched him many times
make a dope song, out of a cheap beat, and any rhymes
its funny im, his best friend, im the other half of his clique
when we rollin' im always in the passenger seat
know first hand the shit he gets in to..
and the crews and the dealin's he's been to
the showdowns causin' damage thats lasting a week
it seems every day i see him bandanged and weak
yet im always by his side, though i despise the violence
hate the thug life, shit gives rise to vile kids
only i know the effect it has on him
he be runnin' scared for too long but he tryna hide the mileage
his style is stylish.. and mine is bare boned
knows i'll hang with him in any weather like a scare crow
we scare bro's we the perfect team..
like jay and silent bob.. with a recurrent theme
the currents been electric.. now i see him back in the zone
he's looking around and he's packin' to go
but he hears a car engine in the distance..
wonders if its coming here.. is there something he's missing..
another car rollin' close.. this one flashing a siren
so he scurry to the nearest alleyway, back in to silence
he goes to the bins, but he hears them surroundin'
im always there, and this time i dont gotta remind him
he got two strikes.. another could mean life in a pen
no more chances, have to connect to his wife through a pen
he has to use me.. he comes out and tries to shoot his way
too late for me to tell, i think that it's a stupid play..
he lets a round off.. and i let out a yell..
as if i aint able to say what im havin' to tell..
he gets hit and i watch as another life is disjointed too..
shit what can i do? this just a guns point of view...
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Post by Arvincible »

wtf this shit was amazing lol

ur fucken talented u know that bitch?

u should save all of ur pieces in a damn album

and go audio with them someday...this is one of the good topics that

uve brought to illest man. Good Shit

i was wondering wtf this was about till the last 5-6 lines lol

anyways the ending couldve had a more explosive kick to it but

its good enough man.

10/10 on creativity
9/10 on flow
8/10 on multis
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Post by Phenom »

"ur fucken talented u know that bitch?"

lmfao.


I had some problems following the flow at points, but this was definitely something you should try to spit on a track. Good read. 8.7/10 Lol.
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Post by |.R.SON.aLL.| »

This Was a Koo Drop,
I`m Not Gon Lie, i Was a Bit Confused ..
i Think U Should`ve Had Better Lead Ups to Tha Endin` ..
Idk it Juss Seems Like Sumptin Was Missin to Me ..
Overall Koo Drop Fam,
Tha Creativity Was On Point ..
Juss Use Better imagery, & a Better Structure Of Lead Ups to Tie Loose Ends ..
So Tha Reader Won't Become Confused ..
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Post by - Mutual - »

i liked this shit
well written story executed well
Arv is prolly right maybe the end could've been a lil bit more explosive
but even without that bang it was still dope
ure an excellent topical writer and u shud deffo audio
at sum point anyway
keep'em comin
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Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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Post by MagicMark »

thanks all..

yeah i used to be topical champ on my other site.. lost it at my first defence tho lol..

and audio wise my voice sounds ass on tape imo.. deep and the accent sounds off too.. so unless theres a way to alter that or change it during editing i dont think an audio is in question lol

thanks for the feed..
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Post by complexity »

MagicMark wrote:thanks all..

yeah i used to be topical champ on my other site.. lost it at my first defence tho lol..

and audio wise my voice sounds ass on tape imo.. deep and the accent sounds off too.. so unless theres a way to alter that or change it during editing i dont think an audio is in question lol

thanks for the feed..
Lol, but when you first came to the site compared to your latest drops there is a substantial difference.
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Post by TreTru »

yeah dog i'm feelin this one..hella ill..
idk though i actually got the feel it was a gun..


his style is stylish.. and mine is bare boned
knows i'll hang with him in any weather like a scare crow

^^^ really liked the flow on this transfer..and at this point i
had a feelin it was a guns point of view..i like
the suspenseful type shyt where U hide the full concept
til almost the end ...good drop IMO..
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Post by Brah-Vo »

Like i said, if people gave you the time to read your pieces they'll discover something significant.
Big props my dude. No need to repeat what everyone said.
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