a life and death collaboration,
an antagonist pessimist against a nation,
stars to the moon a constellation,
pronounced a proficy a revalation,
back witta vengous venomous vigilants,
a stranger angered amongst some immigrants,
no intelligence needed to be reminded,
blinded by the sites of life rewinded,
cant get behind it no followin to control,
ur mind, twist the truth swallowin ur soul,
jus speak it, release the pen to the pad,
look to the future but keep ur head in the past
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this was pretty good
nice flow and yeah the vocab
stood out hope ya bring sum fire next time
this was a lil short so cant really get a whole opinion
keep'em comin
nice flow and yeah the vocab
stood out hope ya bring sum fire next time
this was a lil short so cant really get a whole opinion
keep'em comin
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Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect
!!ILLEST MINDS!!

Not bad you have a stand out rhymescheme that benefits your flow and execution. Vocabulary was ill, however a few lines were forced looking to me such as this:
stars to the moon a constellation,
Definitely could have been re-worded so I grasped what you were trying to say without actually thinking about it. And the 'vigilants' line was a bit confusing too but I'm guessing you meant to say 'vigilance'?
Still, dope for what it was and I look forward to seeing some ill drops since this is only a 'hint at what's comin'. Keep doing you.
stars to the moon a constellation,
Definitely could have been re-worded so I grasped what you were trying to say without actually thinking about it. And the 'vigilants' line was a bit confusing too but I'm guessing you meant to say 'vigilance'?
Still, dope for what it was and I look forward to seeing some ill drops since this is only a 'hint at what's comin'. Keep doing you.
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