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!! Stop The Violence !!

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[align=center]They ..
Labelled Me This Crazy Kid
Bone Thugs And Somethin
Coz i'm a Crazy Kid
Get Drugs For Nothing
So Baby Mommas Blaze They Kids .

Social Commentary Ain't Whack .. But It Speaks The Truth
It's Easy To Judge Someone, But What If It Happen To You??

They Said I Had No Ego ..
Couldn't Make a Name in The Rap Game
Coz
I Always Complain About the Murder He Wrote
But It's Like, The Track Is the Circus
No Spitters Finna Murk This Coz Im The Freak Show

They Startin 2 Dress Like White Boys From The Burb's
Hipster Rap's Absurd, No Substance In Their Words ..
Spending Hard Earned Money On Corduroy Jackets With Tweed Patches
Dudes Droppin Like Flies Coz Hydroponic and Weed Clashes
While The Rich Don't Get Buried .. But They Burned To Ashes.
But Then Again, Niggas From The Hood Is Like Boy Scouts ..
Tear Drops on They Face Like They Earn Their Patches
U A Big Dude Now Coz U Filled His Body With Lead?
And When U Arrested You Protest That U Aint Shot At The Feds ?

.. Dude Please ..
Stop The Violence, Murderin Sprees Bring No Closure
But If You Aint Shoot a Dude Then You Deemed A Poser
It's A Lose Lose Situation For Young Kids in The Streets
Their Grades Is Flunkin, Growin Up Fast, Wonderin If The Tricks In the Treat ..
This All Truth, All Fact .. Why Do U Think The Big Heads Agree For ?
But The Real Question Is..What Am I Gonna Do Apart From Type on this Keyboard?

What Are We All Gonna Do ?
We Want All This To Stop Right?
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Right?[/align]
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If there's one piece you read from me, It should be this one.
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I Always Complain About the Murder He Wrote
But It's Like, The Track Is the Circus
No Spitters Finna Murk This Coz Im The Freak Show
doper bars in the beggining. started slow like e.g.

Social Commentary Ain't Whack .. But It Speaks The Truth
It's Easy To Judge Someone, But What If It Happen To You??
i was hoping the way the song went you used youth instead of you as a personal sense because the direction was going that way....

repeating patches in the next part wasnt the hottest in my opinion but the second time you used it came with a better punch.
and pretty much everything after dude please. was dope. refreshing no lie. i appreciate the depth of these lyrics in the community. i would have wished that instead of pokin at industry cats for a lil bit you focused on the youth of the community a little more but it hit me in the right places b. def a good piece. ide like to see more.... from what ive been hearin that battle record isnt your last will and testament. keep it up kid!
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.. Dude Please ..
Stop The Violence, Murderin Sprees Bring No Closure
But If You Aint Shoot a Dude Then You Deemed A Poser
It's A Lose Lose Situation For Young Kids in The Streets
Their Grades Is Flunkin, Growin Up Fast, Wonderin If The Tricks In the Treat ..
This All Truth, All Fact .. Why Do U Think The Big Heads Agree For ?
But The Real Question Is..What Am I Gonna Do Apart From Type on this Keyboard?
^^^^
this bit was dope.

the rest was kinda blah blah to me honestly
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Post by - Mutual - »

this was straight fire
nice dope lines
hadda great feeling in this
dope shit
i cannt express how dope this shit is
i loved it was fire

They Startin 2 Dress Like White Boys From The Burb's
Hipster Rap's Absurd, No Substance In Their Words ..
Spending Hard Earned Money On Corduroy Jackets With Tweed Patches
Dudes Droppin Like Flies Coz Hydroponic and Weed Clashes
While The Rich Don't Get Buried .. But They Burned To Ashes.
But Then Again, Niggas From The Hood Is Like Boy Scouts ..
Tear Drops on They Face Like They Earn Their Patches
U A Big Dude Now Coz U Filled His Body With Lead?
And When U Arrested You Protest That U Aint Shot At The Feds ?

my fav part
dope shit R.A.I
keep'em comin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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Post by ÐÛÇ£» »

Pretty Clean Cut Peice, Had Some Cool Multis, A Nice Polished Flow, In Some Spots It Had Me Doubting..But S'all Good..Keep Elevating
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Much appreciated for all the feed my dudes
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upping.
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