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okay kids, its story time so gather round the camp-fire
ima tell you the story of a man named sam-plier
c sam-plier was a gangsta n crook with blackened-dreams
he said life isnt life unless you out to capture-cream
a master-fiend smokin crack rocks in his cut surpreem
while he ducts-tha-beams of passing head lights up-from-queens
with no sense of right-n-wrong shermed out he's lightin-bombs
out in front of his momz screamin now i'll right-your-wrong
he toted guns n threw his finger to authority, a minority
with fucked up priorities smoking drugs n snortin-E
cuz he could afford-ta-be crazy menicle loud mouth a physco
he killed my friend michael he was vengeful and spiteful
the same vicious cycle til one day his mouth out grew his body
weilding a shotty he ran to where some cops-be
they dropped their coffee but shit was 2 seconds to late
as Sam's barrels sprayed some rent-a-cop thought he would save the day
pellets fade his face and in the complete disaray
he laughed, bustin off shots each and every way
sirens screaming down every street but sam stood-calm
he drew-arms looked arround his bullets left the whole hood-torn
i could-sworn i seen a wicked smile about his-face
as a single cop drew fire and was immiediatly displaced
in disgrace Sam knew his life would be over-soon
but when ordered-to drop his gun he turned the pistol n unloaded-2
he fell to the ground as all sound went silent
everyone was surely stunned by the show of violence
and in defiance sam plyer layed dead on the ground smiling
proof that in this life some living n some dying
and that is the story of the noctorious Sam-Plyer
who craved the taste of blood like a true vampire
n next time we gather round the camp-fire
ill tell you of this man who knew this man-tyler




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ehh not bad

Post by Alter Ego »

I thought it was ok...
i mean u stayed on topic but the story lacked direction or i missed something

im not so good at stories... but this didnt make me intrested int he main character...

Lacked a few good punchlines to tie it all togeather i guess

Over all easy to read.. flow was ok..

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