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reality maybe what it seems or themes made from a dream
where kings lay with their queens and feast late on quisines
a life most would adore to have without banners or autographs
paparazzi capturing every move from an awful flash..pause
and ponder on the matter i just performed
and you will the master in da sky's/disguise like a thunderstorms..
initiator, i use the sky as my mask
the sun as my mind while my eyes hold the ocean..i'll supply you the raft
but the paddles will be replaced with your hands..
so you can discover the sorrow while vacating the land
and the whistles of the wind blowing across your ear is all but tears
and paranoia conjoined while i coin a verse and fall in fear..
are fall is near,should we wait till our faulty star appears
and lose the light we once cherished and perish what our authors shear
now cross the peer and watch the shimmer of the ocean side
relax and feel the impact of the waves until it's motion dies
see what i ramble bout i aint here to stand and shout..
the life of f***ing chinking in my pockets..i aint kobe tai
rappers are known to lie..in stone their souls leave holes inside
selling a false image for peoples needs to be globalized..
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Post by |.R.SON.aLL.| »

and you will the master in da sky's/disguise like a thunderstorms..

^^.. DAMN! ..
This Shit Was ill as Fuck ..
Whole Track Was Nice Fam ..
i Loved it ..
i`ma Have to Put This On Mah ipod ..
it Was That Crazy ..
That Beat is Mad Nice ..
What`s Tha instrumental?..
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.. it`s S.a.W Bitches ..
.. Niggas ain't Fuckin Wit Tha Team ..

JayGUNNa
RELL FiaSCO

aRViNCiBLE
SCiP
MiiLZ

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Post by - Mutual - »

this was ill dope shit
the lyrics were fire
the beat was dope
ya vocab was great
ya really got this audio shit down
dawg keep'em comin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Post by - Mutual - »

this was ill dope shit
the lyrics were fire
the beat was dope
ya vocab was great
ya really got this audio shit down
dawg keep'em comin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Post by - Mutual - »

also check out "Smile" Ft Kat that is dope shit

http://www.soundclick.com/player/single ... i&newref=1
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Post by Dynamiq »

word word i feel that rell and you to mutual appreciate the feed im getting here.
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Post by Kurse »

Very sick drop and lyrics...Not sure where you're from but it sounds like there's alot of Brooklyn influence in your swagger n'style. So yea...definately solid. Mixing was good and the beat was definately done justice. Very different from what I'd spit on, but your presnence definately worked well with that instrumental.
Only setback I have is that for it being only a 2 minute track, there was just too much talking and too many shout-outs! lol I guess if this was sumthin you'd plug into a mixtape as an additional track, then that'd be fine. But it was half spit, and half talked. I personally would've enjoyed hearing you rip all two minutes of the beat.
But outside of that...the shit was a great listen. Keep it up pimpin.
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Post by Arvincible »

yeah J-venom is sick, ive heard a few tracks a few months back, this dude got mad presence on the mic.

and for the drop, this was sick, he created multis in different unusual places and it really brought something good to the table. this was a minute and 15 seconds of fire.
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Post by Dynamiq »

thanks for the feed kurse as well as you arvince.
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Post by HKX »

dis shit was dope nigga if u ever wanna collab on sum shit holla at me dawg would like 2 drop sum tracks wit u nigga keep droppin I like da beat da lyrics were dope I actually liked how u did da shout outs as well think it could've been longer but u can't always get wat u want right lol
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Post by ÐÛÇ£» »

nice drop again...you very original track..great imagery and nice lyricsm LoL
Dude everything you drop is good lol so its hard to give u feed
@ Hkx..an A.M.E Collab with Dynamiq Would Be Fucking Dope
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Post by Brah-Vo »

Damn.
No need to repeat what all them other dudes said.
Didnt know we had such a talented audio head here.
U considering a career in rap?
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Post by Viral »

dat shit was raw right there man...dope as hell...i like ur flow on it..shits crazy...instrumental was perfect too..keep doin u man..mad props
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Post by precise »

gotta say im a fan, checked out the other tracks too, its all fire, n i noticed uve got alotta songs that made it onto the soundclick charts too man congrats on that
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Post by El Original »

damn homie you fucking good nice fuckin track man, keep going . Peace

(hearing this makes me wanna quit rap lol just kidding)
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