Stuck within a rabbit hole that's so big it could swallow this fucking planet whole//
But Imma stay accountable, man enough to handle what has happened// So..
...time to sneak away & be a slave to the government, May 7th is when I have to go//
Stuck in this old rich white mans system, a corrupted ...

Im sick-wit-it ..like that crack? gimmie it,Hollow head? smokin it
Pheens wit food stamps for bags with HIV Supporting me.. idiots

my favorite line by far. that joint was ll over place though man.

Wrong i streak ina thong and they jaws drop cuz my toned buns
Tote guns runnin on ya set ta rob for ...

shit was dope and deep to me. i got lost a few times with your measure which is aight though cause idk what you had going in your head or your rhyme style. def would set it off at a spoken word competition though.

8/10

dope all around. i read it with the new york sound in my head so i think it fits the bill

7/10

Yup, like fuck ya if you trippin
Me and all my hoes bout to start a new religion

that right there was ill. but i agree with everyone else man the third verse was the biggest building block in this drop right here. overall very reader friendly though

7.8/10

dope overall for sure. i like the subtlety between your line 7.9/10 from me

now who are you besides the product of mom and and dad
are you a product of the nirvana that kurt cobain had
and since he did it you was thinkin it was cool to bang H
now you a fiend and the product of sharin needles is AIDS
or actually HIV when you first contracted
got sick but fuck a doctor man ...

damn. this shit make me wanna quit writing. straight fire top to bottom

qwarter told me to post this in open mic. hope this is that section.

my eyes closed but my eyelids show/ what everyone can think is knowledge but dont know/ and eveyone beleive they scholars but dont progress/ progression has its blocks its stepping stones in the process/ but i will never stop ...

The moniker is slain. im from the south. raleigh 919 to be exact. and im just here to get some feedback from people who respect lyrical prowess.

-- Thu Apr 15, 2010 2:46 pm --

o yea heres a sixteen

my eyes closed but my eyelids show/ what everyone can think is knowledge but dont know/ and eveyone ...