The Subject of Death

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Immortal Jav
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The Subject of Death

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Ravaging the priest,conducting the Hiest, As the sun rise's @ east
With One Rambling Piece, imma Boa Constrictor Not even Dreading the masterful Hitler, You Bones aint fresh like a past victim of Hannibal lector
Im a cannibal activist, so scream as soon as I get ya, I move more keys than Vito Corleone Did back in his days, even When you put up the white Flag that aint working for me!!!
im sharp shootin at aliens, ill Pull out your seed before i Preoccupied this Abortion again
Conducting Malice n wonderland over again, smoldering Alice in the rabbit hole then ill murder her again - Castrating Castro my mass is =
to the opening of a black hole, you're straight as a circle like a Audi logo!!
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Alright, here is what you need to become a better emcee- Multie rhyming scene cause this one syllable thing isn't working it's elementary rhymes honestly. Next conduct a scheme keep the same story throughout the whole thing. Finally work on rhyme structure, these are the basic keys to getting better.
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Re: The Subject of Death

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I was just trying to follow the ideas and got lost, bruh. Cohesive rhymes and subjct matter throughout are key to a dope piece. Keep posting, bruh.
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