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For The Last Few Weeks I Aint Been Feeling The Best
Im Sick Of Living..Fuck Im Sick Of Dealing With Stress
Death, Just Seems Right Its Became My Addiction
It Just Seems Hell Is A Place That I Would Fit In

Fuck It..Its Over, Man I Dont Even Know Myself
Put A Bullet In Me..Come On Dress Pull It Pussy!I Wanna Go To Hell..
Can I Beleive Suicides On My Mind?Just Let Loose The Flame
Or Tie A Noose And Hang..Damn,No One Can Tell Whos To Blame
Maybe It's Because I Was A Social Outcast..People Said Id Pass Through It
Or Maybe It Was The Video Games?Or The Angry Rap Music!?
Nah It's Cuz I Was Overlooked By Cupid..Or Bullied When I Was Younger
Or Was I Infected By The Pain That I Witnessed In My Mother
Hell I Dont Know..I Just Wanna Become Friends With The 4-5
I Dont Wanna Vent No More..Dont Wanna Write No More Rhymes
I Wanna Sit Next To Satan,Hell Il Let Him Nickname Baby Lucifer
Haunt Innocent Children..That Just Came Through To Earth
WAIT Lets Review This First..To Accomplish This I Need To Pull It
Well What Am I Waiting For..I Got The Barrel And The Bullet
Fuck It..Alright But My Familly Is In The Next Room
Im Shaking..BLOAW!I Fucking Skim My Scalp Leavin A Flesh Wound
My Dad Comes Rushing In,Screaming "What The Fuck Happened!"
But Im Just Sitting Still..Star Struck And Gaspin
Im Thinking To Myself "How The Fuck Can This Be Possible"
Dad Picks Me Up From My Chair..Im Rushed To The Hospital
Stiches In My Head..Fuck My Whole Life Has Been Ruined
Cuz Dad Asked The Question..What The Hell Were You Doing?
I Explain Everything,Now They Dont Even Look At Me Like A Human Life Form
Now Im Locked Up Taking Pills In A Syche Ward
So Please To Anyone That Plans To End Their Life
..Aim Right..

Thanks man..good look on the feed

I Liked This One a lot More Than Tha Gimmie Tha Loot Joint ..
This One Was Pretty Sick ..
But i Woulda Liked it More if You Got a Little Bit More Bloody With Tha Scene Off Tha Mistake ..
Like Showin Tha Reader Tha Flesh Hangin Off Tha Roof ..
Or Sumptin Descriptive ya Know ..
But Other Than That ..
Nice ass Job imo ..

this piece was dope man
nice flow written well
vocab nice
9/10
keep'em comin

Dooooopppee!
Lol dtk u went off with this piece
Shit was thought provoking, really good concept and story developement, multis were ok and the flow was decent as well, everything was so serious at first but honestly...when I read the "what the hell were u doing?" line I started roflol
Idk man this was nice

9.98756315/10 for u buddy

Thanks Arv and Mutual..Its appreciated

Son You Fucking WENT OFF!...
I've Always Wanted To Write Somethin Like This..
i Will Next Time im Depressed As Fuck...
Son you Jus Brought Description..
Had Me Feeling Emotion through This Piece..
ya Lines Was ill.. The Multis Was On Point
You Kill't The Concept Of Killing Ya Self! LMAO..

9.5/10...