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battle pride

Posted: Sat Jun 21, 2008 3:45 am
by Arvincible
This was off the dome in a cypher, I liked it so read up!!

I value my battles-homie, extraordinary wins I'll take each cat-as-trophies/catastrophies
Out-cast-the-phonies, U make money but I be dragon ballin like I was master-roshi!
Ill leave ya life-crushed, lyk the death of christ-rushed, ud be quickly-crossed,
im insane at winnin but my drops are more so like Read-dick-u-lost!/rediculous,
Kill the bitch-mades with switch-blades, word-for-word I make sure each verb'll-hurt
A verbal-burst, it aint a wet Tee contest when I say ill squirt-ya-shirt, ull get murdered-twerp!
my head-is-clear, aim right, the vendetta's-steered, leave ya cryin a well-of-tears,
It well-appears, that each verse I drop is pure SOLID...like Metal Gears!!
i slay-pussy, I stay-busy, but leave a message-still, watch the tension-build,
I leave ya with unpleasant-chills, not to mention-thrills, puttin my victims to sleep like depressant-pills
Lost battles I shouldnt have, I thank the fags-that-voted, n fuck goin back-to-quote-it,
Ill just burst ya brain to watch ya rags-explodin cuz Like a Dodge packed, I keep a Magnum-loaded!!

Posted: Sat Jun 21, 2008 4:19 am
by - Mutual -
woahh nice shit
better than most of my writtens
well nice multies
nice flow
stayed on point
nice punches the best
9/10 this really is good shit

Kill the bitch-mades with switch-blades, word-for-word I make sure each verb'll-hurt
A verbal-burst, it aint a wet Tee contest when I say ill squirt-ya-shirt, ull get murdered-twerp!
my head-is-clear, aim right, the vendetta's-steered, leave ya cryin a well-of-tears,
It well-appears, that each verse I drop is pure SOLID...like Metal Gears!!

my fave bit^
kep'em comin
wooah sum nice shit right here

Posted: Sat Jun 21, 2008 5:41 am
by |.R.SON.aLL.|
This Drop Was Koo Fam ..
Coulda Picked Up On Tha Creativity Side Of Tha Piece ..
Good Multies as Usual ..
But Try Sumptin New ..
Get Harder Punches ..
Cus Thas What People Love Tha Most in Battles ..
Are Tha Hardhittin Punchlines ..
If You ain't Really Got Those, Then You Really ain't Got That Much Battlin Pride ..

Overall it Was a Koo Piece Fam ..
Keep Droppin ..
S.a.w Up Nukka

Posted: Sat Jun 21, 2008 6:20 am
by Arvincible
Lol this isn't a battle verse, and im not attackin anyone much, its more like subliminals, but yeah thanks for the feed fammo.

Uppin por favor

Posted: Sat Jun 21, 2008 3:53 pm
by Haz
This Was Decent... i've Seen Better From u..
I Wasn't Feelin The First Bar.. The Rest Was Strait..
Multis Wus Good All Thru.. Read Dick<< Wasn't i Dunno.. There..
i Ain Connect ... The Verse Was a Strait SCript Though....
Keep Droppin Kid

Posted: Sun Jun 22, 2008 2:05 pm
by Dead Silence
i loved this.
best drop in here for a long time.
i felt the emotion in it. i think this was flawless for the most part.

i would leave my fav bars. but all if was my favorite.

gooooood shit

Posted: Mon Jun 23, 2008 7:03 am
by MagicMark
yeah hot shiz...

good points first..

flow and multis hot, metal gear / wet t-shirt plays are nice, magnum cool too, internal rhymes where hot.. and decent plays, so a good piece

bad points would be..

the problem i have with the opener, is if you take the word as catastrophies.. it reads... "extraordinary wins I'll take each catastrophies", which doesnt make alot of sense, no what i mean, to be a real hot/hot play, it has to make sense in two ways, ridiculous play may be a little stretched to, for my style, but the play itself is pretty cool

thats my only cripes lol, being picky cause you on a high level yano

good shiz..

Posted: Mon Jun 23, 2008 8:28 am
by Arvincible
Yeah those first two bars were experiments lol I wanted to use them, they weren't great but yeah thanks for the feed guys and mark thanks for the good pointers, much appreciated.

Upppin forrr feeed