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The Moments Yours, But Its Hard Breathing And Pushin Depression Outta Sight
Still; Ya Gotta Keep Shit Together, Even If Ya Squeezin Ya Asshole Tight
Odds Against You And Ya Bettin Ya Life, The Cards Been Replaced With A Mic
And The Time; It's Always Against You Ticking Away, Plotting Treason
So The Clocks Found Guilty Of Murder, So Its Hanging For Obvious Reason
You Live Like What A Topside Of Eighty Years? So In Reality Is It Worth It?
Tryna Wipe Tears Offa This Note Pad, And At The Same Time Searchin For Puprose
I Dunno Man, Its Like Writing Seems Worthless, Gotta Make Paper To Pay Bills
And At The Same Time, My Moms Ill, Tryna Keep My Head Above Water And Stay Real

well nice piece but i mean you could be better if ya wrote longer verses
nice multies nice concept
8/10
keep'em comin

good shit
loved the flow.
and the concept

good read

Inconsistent rhyme scheme, but good structure - had a nice flow to it.. other then that it's straight.. not good and not bad.. but u should be honoured for puttin all that emotion into it.. juss don't become to abstract and poetical when it comes to what u write, cause that'll just be boring..