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The Contour Of Casual Excellence..With Prompt Force Hassling Regiments
Taking A Break?..Nah I'm Killing Off Spring Like Doctors Massacring Pregnant Chicks!
Until Fends Are Subtle And Lives Are So Defaced..Features Cosmetics Trouble..!
Andrew More Attention Than Peters Loss Ended Double!
While Misanthropes Flip Me Off Slender Slim
Stop Ovary Acting!..Im Sick..It's Not My Fault They Hid The Vixen Cough Medicine...!
My Bulk Appearance Might Cause Ya Larynx To Twist..!
Either Retreat ,Or Finish In The Best Way Possible Like A Foster Parents Commit..!
Stop Whining! Let The Claret Subsist..Before I Disperse Flames And Fuel..
And Leave Loons Stuck In The Closet Like The First Day Of School..!
Not My Fault The Lord Birthed This Bad Seeds Venue Beneath Fool!
Constantly Fertalizing And Adding Bonemeal To The Root Of Evil..!
No One Would Ever Elude Their Abusive Steeze..!
Acting Like Gruesome Beast.. When In Reality..Ya'll Wouldnt Even Hit Puberty!
Sheesh..! I Should Cloud Their Hopes With Vapor Smog!..
While Sitting In a Class Of My Own..As These Cowards Throw Paper Balls..!
So Fear The Notes Sincere N Dope..
That Appear With Quotes To Destroy Your Spirit Like I Managed To Kill The Colt..!
Joel Is The King Lending Stooges Pressure To Think..Gasp!
SOBE It..But May I Ask..Wheres The Stupid Energy Drink Ad!?

yeah nice stuff nice flow
easy to read good layout
8/10 i liked it

Until Fends Are Subtle And Lives Are So Defaced..Features Cosmetics Trouble..!
Andrew More Attention Than Peters Loss Ended Double!
While Misanthropes Flip Me Off Slender Slim
Stop Ovary Acting!..Im Sick..It's Not My Fault They Hid The Vixen Cough Medicine...!

my fave bit^
but you might wanna get more full rhymes like slim and medicine not really that good but i liked it anyway keep'em comin

thanks man.