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Quick Free.First drop On IL
Posted: Sat Jun 14, 2008 6:10 am
by Vertikal
Yo RR...
I see you fam..
iDominate...
...I've never rapped about blasting and riding, that'll never be my alignment...
...Cuz my words are everlasting and blinding like the shining of white diamonds...
...So I never lack timing to drop incite; My knowledge lives on forever like Sierra Leons Confinements...
...So many twists and turns, I've survived slits and burns, Everytime I write, this is what I feel...
...Like I'm carrying the wait of the world on my shoulders and I'm still moving up hill...
...Shit feels like I grew up with just to much skill...
...You can study my style and try and immitate my flow,they'll still never feel you on the level that they feel me...
...And I'll sure as fuck never be you, cuz logically being you would surely kill me...
Posted: Sat Jun 14, 2008 6:31 am
by Arvincible
ok i hope you didnt recycle from ur other site and that this piece was brand new, because we just had a recent problem with someone new who came in and recycled from the other site.
but this piece was pretty dope man, ur structure is a bit iffy but its not a big problem. the ending was like a poem and ur multis kinda fell off in the end. i think u have a lot of space to improve but your style is good. keep it
up man
Posted: Sat Jun 14, 2008 8:03 am
by Vertikal
Word thanks man, but this was litterly a keystyle lol..
and nah man, not recycled.
But the first 2 lines were inspired by my old signiture, but were entirely changed.
Thanks for feeding.
drop a link and i'll return the feed.
Posted: Sat Jun 14, 2008 8:36 am
by - Mutual -
okay nice first stuf multies fell off abit as you went along check out 2 bar cypher i'm obseesed wit multies but good shit keep'em comin
i liked it
Posted: Sat Jun 14, 2008 9:30 am
by precise
interesting.. there was something about the vocab and the flow that i thought was awsome, definately decent for a little keystyle
So many twists and turns, I've survived slits and burns, Everytime I write, this is what I feel...
...Like I'm carrying the wait of the world on my shoulders and I'm still moving up hill...
^^ nice
Posted: Sat Jun 14, 2008 10:59 pm
by |.R.SON.aLL.|
..Yeah I Liked Tha Piece ..
It Was Wrapped Up Nicely ..
Flow Was Good ..
Liked How U Bounced Back Wit Words in Tha First 2 Bars ..
That Was Pretty Dope ..
It`s Nice to See Some New Shit ..
Keep Droppin Fam
Posted: Sat Jun 14, 2008 11:19 pm
by DressToKill
This is alright..your rhyming structure is everywhere lol it threw me off..I do see alot of potential in you since you have the basics of multies down which you can expand your other writing tools off of..but keep up dude
Posted: Sun Jun 15, 2008 3:14 am
by Viral
i like dis piece..it was pretty tight...i wasnt sure u were gonna actually drop..lol...the end line was tight...
...And I'll sure as fuck never be you, cuz logically being you would surely kill me...
it aint all complex n mutlied out er ne thing...but the way it sits is tellin da truth.....keep doin u...stay active!....or ill suddenly start MSN stalkin u...now that i know who u r!..LOL..dat would be too much work tho...so dont worry...hahaha
Posted: Mon Jun 16, 2008 12:52 pm
by Vertikal
Word thanks for all the feed family.
Pm me a link anytime ya want some feed!
Holla!