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just some old work of mine.

[align=center]I am what I contain, a venomous retain
The brains drain to factual freedom
carved in vein
knockin ni**as heads to death beds,
make em dillusional
my formats at the stage of pages
in a musical
Prestige ambition with missions
of dishin whippins within the proxcemity
of bitches who fail to listen
its history in the makin
takin records and breakin names
Im lyk a scratch-off lotto card
a 60/40 game
Pain to remain the queen is what I endure
sure the crown is shiny and kindly im ensured
his and her equality in quantities of gold
too much to spend yet to little to hold
let the truth be told, i sold my soul to hell
so i spit fire with a story to tell
I yell for proclaimation in every conversation
let it be known Im declairing
World Domination[/align]

feedback would be appreciated. ~*~CiCi~*~

for a short piece its nice..i liked it...surprised to see a girl drop in da scrips tho..haha...u came outta nowhere.....i like ur style tho...alotta rhymes....some nice multies....ur structure was coo...it worked out well didnt make it hard to read...keep doin ya thang n droppin writtens

btw u might wanna introduce urself in da new users forum...jst a suggestion

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/names ... t8540.html

^^^lol...already did. i just stopped signing on for a while

lol...ooooo!!...I KNEW THAT!...haha...not really....well dats coo then...my bad..haha...im not up to date wit all da people who have joined...unless there active...so that could explain y i had no idea..

lol.. yah...thanx for the feedback.

i'll prolly drop some more later.

u need a link

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/rule- ... t9079.html