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Another, 5 minutes drop, just doing something different.

TOUCH- if you feelin me, BUST- if you really see
TRUST- if you need belief, CUSS- till your ears will bleed
PUS- out you pores will seep, LUST- when you need a peep
FUSS- if Im hurtin dude, TUSK- through your murkin crew
DUSK- when the night rolls in, DUCK- when a fight pulls him
FUCK- when its not a sin, SUCK- cause u can never win
MUSK- when your body cold, MUST- trim your body folds
ADJUST- to the times of old, DUST- from your casket holes
FILLS- into the air above, KILL- but always wear a glove
STILL- give your peers a shove, REAL- is what you queers arent of
PROVE- worth by snipin you, BLUE- skin just from typin dude
SHOT- him jus for sightin her, STOP- hearts just to tighten dirt
POP- at the loudest sound, COPS- arent the proudest now
FOUND- a body in a ditch. POUND- the face of a snitch
GROUND- your body into sod, BOUND- cuz u cant hear ur god
SURROUND- me while I take a bow, WOUND- to be the tighest now

Any word with a Hyphen is meant to have emphasis on THAT word

A challenge concept rap that came off pretty dope man.

You know, you're elevating when you push yourself to come up with some original idea and do well with it.

Thanks for the feed man. It's appreciated.

nice idea. it sounded really good when i read it. the flow and multis were nice. only problem is a some of it didnt make sense to me. i dunno its probably me whos missing something but its good to see people trying new things


FOUND- a body in a ditch. POUND- the face of a snitch
GROUND- your body into sod, BOUND- cuz u cant hear ur god
^^^
like this bit the best

Nice solid piece, creativity stands out on this one. A few forced multis but I'd let you get by cuz of the overall work. 8.5/10 good job!

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Yeah this is something different..

U have words that sound alike stanfing out.

Its pretty creative man, but as a flow, its crap, lol
Its really choppy but hey I don't think you were trying to do flow here anyways

Its really poetic, like a DC status piece.

Its very vivid cuz u have good imagery in the diction you chose. Good shit man

Imma give this an 7/10 for its uniqueness, but I think if u put more time into it, u can come with something really hot.

Thanks for the feed, man.

sounded pretty good when i red it nice concept somin new ya know 9/10
nice shit keep'em comin

Interestin nice concepts.. But it's missin sumthin yahh know..like punches or sumthin..idk.. creative idea tho

EAT..what i do when im hungry
BEAT..what i do when im horny


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